Shellybelly44's Second Application

[shellybelly44 0]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name:

Shellybelly44

How old are you?:

14

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:

Canada, Standard Mountain Time

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

Yes

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:

I love playing video games and I would like to become a video game designer when I grow up. Minecraft is like a second nature to me and I have played it since Beta 1.6. I like exploring the computer and finding out new things about computers!

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

At least 9 hours

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:

I know that Roleplaying is a type game that players have several choices that they can do just like in real life.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:

I once got married on another minecraft server when I could have just stayed single but then I had to kill my wife because I was starving and then I ate her :-D

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:

When the player goes outside the rules without really braking the rules.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is:

When the player takes advantage of the game using some goal on one thing.

What do you expect this server will be like?:

A tough environment where you have to survive orcs and other great monsters! But I know there will be some safe havens. The server will probably be like Lord Of the Rings

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:

Well I have my own server but it isn't that special but I still play on it. I used to play on Im Deity but then it got boring.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

Yes, I have

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:

Yes, of course!

How did you hear about us?:

Minestatus and my friend

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?:

Yes: http://bit.ly/HuNfrc

In-Character:

Character Name:

Shellgor

What Race are you?:Orc

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

My character was born into the war and was raised to be warrior. He is pure brute and will stop at nothing to win a fight. He is now age 18 and he immediately left his home. He does not like teaming up with people so he has gone lone wolf. He is 6 foot 4 and is very muscular. He does not like being around people and is always wanting to kill something.

Shellgor has a few weaknesses: His sense of smell; when he was 16 he had gotten into a fight and an arrow shot straight into his nose. He was lucky that he wasn't killed. Another weakness is that he has arthritis in his fingers and a little bit in his hand (he cracks his knuckles a lot) His last weakness is his short temper. If someone such as an ally where to provoke him just a little bit he would immediately try to kill them. This is why he will probably become a villain. Shellgor loves to eat but usually never gets the chance to. If shellgor where to be invited into a clan he would certainly accept but he would have to train himself not to kill anybody. The reason he would join is because he wants to learn how to become a better warrior and this would certainly bump up his skills a few more levels. Also this would help him become a team-ate.

What is your Character's ambitions?:

He would like to become a warrior in the orc clan kaxil or azog. If not he will probably become a villain which is fine with him

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):

Axe... Used as a weapon

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?

Aside from his fighting skills his cooking capabilites. Shellgor has a very little patience but he can fish. He is also a very good lumberjack.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):

Attached to the application

Other Information about your Character:

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

I would yell at the guards and not kill them because I would be at a public place. If they do not walk away from the hafling I would most certainly beat them to a pulp. Then I would tell the hafling to leave at once and never go near any more warriors unless they seem to be very safe.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

I would talk to him and try to hold my anger back and say: "nothin' for me today". Then I would walk away and take my anger out on a tree (cut it down).

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

If I was a villain I most certainly take the iron bars but if I was part of an orc clan I would tell someone of a higher rank than me and then they would decide what I shall do.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

I would ask for food and give them a few pieces of gold. If they don't give me any food I would probably try to kill something but then I would probably be killed by my brethren. So I would try to just keep searching for food.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

I would most definitely fight but if it where my enemy asking I would just walk away. The reason I would fight is because of the reward or if I was in a clan and my clan was doing it I would also...even if there was no reward.

[James Undercroft 129]

I am very sorry, but your application has been moved to the denied section of the forums. There are numerous reasons for this, all of which I have included in my feedback below this message. In the mean time there is an abundant source of information, stories, guides and other helpful tips to get you on your way to being accepted; all you need to do is look around. I would suggest the lord of the craft wiki and application submissions section of the forums to start off your little quest to make the best application. Good luck!

The reasons that I have denied you are:

Your have used incorrect formatting of the application.

You need to re-copy the application format. Make sure you have copied the text from the white box and not anywhere else. Also make sure that you do not delete anything in [these square brackets] as they are vital to keep the colour, boldness and size of the text. If you are having trouble because your entire application turns out in funny colours, make sure that you are writing your answers on a line underneath the question, as this is a common error and can mess up the formatting of your application.

Your definition of Roleplaying is not what we are after.

Your current definition of Roleplaying displays to me that you do not fully understand what Roleplaying is all about. Please go back and so some research as to what Roleplaying is. I needn’t remind you that this is a Roleplaying server, if you do not know how to role-play or do not show evidence that you are keen to learn how to role-play I suggest you find a Minecraft server better suited to your needs.

You did not give valid examples of RP, or you did not describe how your examples are RP.

You need to describe to us how the games or locations you have talked about pertain to an RP environment.

RPGs or Role-Playing Games are not RP’s.

Games such as World of Warcraft, Skyrim, Rift or similar do not count as Roleplaying as there is no person to person interaction within a Roleplaying scenario (unless of course you were on a Roleplaying server in which you need to explain where and how you role-played to show your understanding of the term).

Your definition of power-gaming is incorrect.

In lord of the craft we use an RP definition of power-gaming, rather than an RPG definition. While these may seem like the same thing, we can loosely judge that an RPG definition would fit in with games such as World of Warcraft or Skyrim, and the RP definition would fit in with games such as D&D or other person to person Roleplaying. Please do not confuse the definition we use to the definition that other Roleplaying groups may use, relating to creating a character which is too powerful, or doing an “overpowered” action; this is not the definition we use. To make sure you have the correct definition you can either have a look at the Lord of the Craft wiki, or by joining our Team Speak channel (send me a message if you need help getting started) and asking an experienced member. I would also like you to include an example of the term as it demonstrates your understanding of the concept.

Your definition of meta-gaming is incorrect.

There are very few definitions of meta-gaming so it would be rare that you could confuse meta-gaming with another term. I would suggest that you go back to researching (or perhaps begin to research if you guessed the definition) and find out a correct definition pertaining to Roleplaying. I suggest that you do a Google search for the term, look on the Lord of the Craft wiki or join our Team Speak channel. Please do remember that plagiarising (copying someone else’s work) may warrant you a temporary or permanent ban from applying to the server: so don’t do it! I would also like you to include an example of the term as it demonstrates your understanding of the concept.

You need to have a character last name.

Unless you have a specific reason for why you do not have a last name of your character, you need to write a last name to show that you have put some in-depth thought processes into developing and creating your character.

Your biography has a lot of errors.

You did not include enough about your characters past, rather you just explained your character’s personality and/or description.

Your biography currently shows Villain attributes. These are things such as corruption, thievery, murder, cannibalism or unholy worship. These sorts of things must be applied for separately to this application, but can only be applied for after around a month of being accepted and Roleplaying on the server.

Your biography contains powergaming. In the context of your biography this can be anything from encountering an enemy and just beating it without explaining how, or just defeating it unrealistically.

You have not included any (or much) lore from the world of Asulon or the lore you did include contradicts that of Asulon. I recommend that you do a lot of research as to what you race is and how they act, as well as towns and places that you could use in your biography. I would also like to note that the entire server escaped from Aegis about 25 in game years ago to move to Asulon, I suggest you do some research on this point. Do note this is not Skyrim or Lord of the Rings, we have our own universe with our own races. For ideas and lore you can look on the Lord of the Craft wiki (link on the main page), the Role-play or History sections of the forums or better yet; talk to the people themselves. Just join in our Team Speak channel and ask around! We welcome new people :)

Your story does not make too much sense.

Your biography is not substantial enough. You need to write more about your character, write more detail and more depth. If your biography is less than two paragraphs long or is a bit too short it will be automatically denied. You need to write a minimum of two paragraphs (which in themselves must contain at least five full sentences).

You need to complete the entire biography, detailing all your characters history, age, personality and description. We also like to see little role-play quirks such as habits like the constant brushing back of a fringe, or the scratching of an itchy palm.

Every single thing in your application must have a justification. For example:

John’s father taught him swordsman ship and the lay of the land. X BAD

John’s father was a retired swordsman in the Oren military, after the undead attacks and the moving to Asulon he decided it was time that he lay down the sword for more important matters, family. Now days John’s father teaches John the way of the sword, not so that he can join any particular military, but so that he can defend himself for future experiences to come. √GOOD

Your ambitions are underdeveloped.

You need to show some advanced thought processes. What would your character like to do in the near and distant futures? What is your character planning? You also need to justify your decisions. Why does your character want to do this? Things such as planning to kill all bandits, orcs, humans etc. are unacceptable ambitions as this would require a villainous activity.

Your answers to the favourite tool/best skill questions are underdeveloped.

You need to justify why you have chosen the choices you have. It is all well and good that your character can run really fast, or is light on their feet; but why?

You need to embed the screenshot of your skin.

For me to accept you I must be able to view your skin as I need to judge whether it is acceptable for this server, reason being if someone joins this server, but do not show their skin but they have a Tron skin on I would be in big trouble, but for me to be able to view your skin it must also be embedded. The reason your skin needs to be embedded is because recently people have been linking some dangerous websites to where the image of their skin has been hosted. To avoid this we request that the image is directly linked to this website either as an upload or being embedded into the post itself. You can do this by following this tutorial:

1. Go in-game and press the “F5” button TWICE. (Not once as this will show the back of your character)

2. Take a screen shot by pressing the "PrntScr" button on a windows computer or press F2 on the keyboard, then go to start => Run and type in this: %appdata%/.minecraft/screenshots

3. Find the screenshot and open it in an image manipulation program such as Paint or Gimp.

4. Crop the image so that only the area close to your skin (including the skin) remains.

5. Save the file and go to tinypic.com

6. Upload the file

7. Click ONCE on the text box underneath: "IMG Code for Forums & Message Boards"

8. Right click and copy the entire text

9. Paste in your new application

*Note* If you want a tutorial for Macs, please send me a message on the forums.

Some or all of your answers to the Open Response questions need a lot of improvement.

Instead of describing what your character would do, you need to assume that your character is in the situation and acting as they would in that situation. You need to describe a scene of RP. This means that you cannot write “If this happens, then my character would do that.” As this shows that you are not Roleplaying, you are answering the question from what you think that your character might do. You need to show us that you know who your character is, you know what the situation is and you know how your character is going to react.

This also means that you need to write in full RP. For example:

Josh talks to the shopkeeper, buys a few apples, pays the shop keeper and leaves. X BAD

Josh walks up to the man standing behind the rough oaken market stand. The sounds of a busy market can be heard all around him. An annoying fly buzzes around his head, so he absent-mindedly begins to inefficiently swat it away. “Ah, greetings shopkeeper! I was just browsing your wares.” The shopkeeper nods at Josh and then turns towards another customer to attempt to assist them the way all market shopkeepers must. Suddenly Josh felt a slight tugging sensation on his belt. He was about to brush it off as nothing, perhaps just someone bumping into him until he realised his belt was slightly lighter. He noticed a man beginning to run off in the opposite direction of himself. He glanced down to see that his coin purse was missing. He put two and two together and then shouted at the top of his lungs. “STOP THEIF!”… √ GOOD!

We expect that you write in full RP and that you write a full paragraph or more for each question.

If you have any questions about my feedback, or would like to create some constructive criticism about the way I give feedback (I.E am I being TOO blunt, or am I coming across rude) then please send me a message! I take all questions, none are stupid! :) You are not allowed to apply again for a full 24 hours.

[James Undercroft 129]

Moved to Denied Forum