Fourth Appulcation

[TheMichaelBez 0]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name:

michaelbez1

How old are you?:

14 becoming 15 September 12th it says I am 12 in my first app I honestly ment to put 14.

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:

UTC+0, Greenwich Mean Time, England

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

Yes, My spelling can be a little off when I write quickly. But English is the only language I know.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:

I am a School pupil who goes to a English boarding school. I am an average teenager who likes football, girls and computer games. I spend most of the holidays playing on minecraft severs.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

Almost every day.

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:

I learnt about role play through a friend who plays on a role play sever it sounds as if he has a really good time on it so i want to give it a go. RP is the player (me) forgets all i know about my life and lives the life of the character he is controlling. So in situations I try and do what the character would do not what me myself would do.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:

This would be my first go at a RP sever.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:

To influence the players IC with OC info. to give him and advantage. over the other players and game in general. this rewins the whole point of RP and the fun of the game.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is:

To force something on a player and not give him a chance to counter what is being done to him. so if a police man did it on another sever it would go something like 'the police officer grabs the robbers legs and trips him over pulls out his tazer and socks the robber. the robber is now knocked out. the police officer flings him in the back of his car and drives off.' all of that happens and the robber could not do anything.

What do you expect this server will be like?:

A amazing world filled with great buildings and people. Hopefully a really fun experience.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:

Legendary craft, it was just to big and had no purpose. the admins had no control and bribed players with diamonds.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

I agree and have read the rules and understand.

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:

Yes, I promise.

How did you hear about us?:

Planet Minecraft, in the sever section.

Have you previously made an Application? If so could you link us to your last Application?: http://www.lordofthe...plication-form/

http://www.lordofthe...plication-form/

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/51366-thirdsecond-application-third-time-lucky/

In-Character:

Character Name:

Michael Windfire

What Race are you?:

Human

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

My name is Michael Windfire, I am 27 now and I have decided to leave my family. Well they aren't rely my family. My real Mother and Father were killed before I knew them and my uncle could not take care of me because he did not have the funds. However he took me to the Elven city. Where a family of elfs took me in as one of their own. They names were Leondes and Fae. Leondes repeatedly left home to go on adventurer with his friends. I told my adopted mother that I would be just like dad when I grew up and bring back pots of gold for her. On My 10th birthday my dad brought me a bow. It was lovely. He spent many afternoons teaching me how to use a bow like a proper elf and soon I had mastered the bow. At the age of 17 my dad started taking me hunting. My dad taught me the art of blending in to my surroundings and to be to move unseen through the forest and to track wild beasts. Years flew by and I decided it was time for me to leave. My mother and father where sad to see me go but I promised I would return. I kissed my mother and hugged my father he handed me a cloak it was green and had a hood. Then they both waved me off as I walked off out of town.

OOC- Michael Windfire is a young human who has left home to look for adventurer like what his adopted father had done. He although does not show it yet but feels very deeply for the loss of his parents he says he is going on an adventurer but he really just wants revenge on his parents. This feeling off loss makes him very angry this anger sometimes blides him of his actions and he can become hash in some dedications. Though in his spare time he likes going to an inn drinking and talking with the locals. He has dark brown hair and wears his green cloak proudly on his back.

What is your Character's ambitions?:

To go on a adventurer like his adopted father but also wants to seek revenge on his real parents death.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):

The bow he is most skillful with this weapon. He believes it is the most useful weapon in war and hunting.

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?

He is a surprisingly good shot with a bow and arrow. His elven father helped him to become so good with the bow.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):There is one with hood and one without. Is that okay?

Other Information about your Character: He is very adapt to nature due to elf training. he can move quickly through thick forest.

Open-Response-Questions:

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

He would notice the warriors are armed and possibly going to kill the hobbit he would feel inclined to help but would not be able to so call the nearest guard or warrior to aid him in the mater.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

'Hello, what ye be selling?' as he pears into the stall he says 'only rags and boots! A rick lad like you should be selling more. I do not need any of your wears, Thank you. Fair-well.' Then continue looking for a place to sleep.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

Looking in the chest and seeing the iron bars and a sword my character leaves it be because he thinks ' I should not take these just in case the owner is still here. lets look for him.' after not finding him he stays the night in the hut and continues on in the morning.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

'Hello, I am lost and Hungry do u have any food to trade.' then noticing them all walking towards him quickly he says to one 'Where is the nearest town?' that man pulls out a sword and he walks quickly towards Michael. So he quickly turns and runs away in search of a place to sleep.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?: 'Ye I shall aid ye in this engagement it will be good practice. There is no need for the reward just a meal and a warm place to sleep tonight should be fine. I then will be off in the morning.'

[James Undercroft 129]

I am very sorry, but your application has been moved to the denied section of the forums. There are numerous reasons for this, all of which I have included in my feedback below this message. In the mean time there is an abundant source of information, stories, guides and other helpful tips to get you on your way to being accepted; all you need to do is look around. I would suggest the lord of the craft wiki and application submissions section of the forums to start off your little quest to make the best application. Good luck!

The reasons that I have denied you are:

Your have used incorrect formatting of the application.

You need to re-copy the application format. Make sure you have copied the text from the white box and not anywhere else. Also make sure that you do not delete anything in [these square brackets] as they are vital to keep the colour, boldness and size of the text. If you are having trouble because your entire application turns out in funny colours, make sure that you are writing your answers on a line underneath the question, as this is a common error and can mess up the formatting of your application.

Your biography has a lot of errors.

You have not included any (or much) lore from the world of Asulon or the lore you did include contradicts that of Asulon. I recommend that you do a lot of research as to what you race is and how they act, as well as towns and places that you could use in your biography. I would also like to note that the entire server escaped from Aegis about 25 in game years ago to move to Asulon, I suggest you do some research on this point. Do note this is not Skyrim or Lord of the Rings, we have our own universe with our own races. For ideas and lore you can look on the Lord of the Craft wiki (link on the main page), the Role-play or History sections of the forums or better yet; talk to the people themselves. Just join in our Team Speak channel and ask around! We welcome new people :)

Every single thing in your application must have a justification. For example:

John’s father taught him swordsman ship and the lay of the land. X BAD

John’s father was a retired swordsman in the Oren military, after the undead attacks and the moving to Asulon he decided it was time that he lay down the sword for more important matters, family. Now days John’s father teaches John the way of the sword, not so that he can join any particular military, but so that he can defend himself for future experiences to come. √GOOD

Your ambitions are underdeveloped.

You need to show some advanced thought processes. What would your character like to do in the near and distant futures? What is your character planning? You also need to justify your decisions. Why does your character want to do this? Things such as planning to kill all bandits, orcs, humans etc. are unacceptable ambitions as this would require a villainous activity.

Your answers to the favourite tool/best skill questions are underdeveloped.

You need to justify why you have chosen the choices you have. It is all well and good that your character can run really fast, or is light on their feet; but why?

Some or all of your answers to the Open Response questions need a lot of improvement.

Halfling, not hobbit.

Instead of describing what your character would do, you need to assume that your character is in the situation and acting as they would in that situation. You need to describe a scene of RP. This means that you cannot write “If this happens, then my character would do that.” As this shows that you are not Roleplaying, you are answering the question from what you think that your character might do. You need to show us that you know who your character is, you know what the situation is and you know how your character is going to react.

This also means that you need to write in full RP. For example:

Josh talks to the shopkeeper, buys a few apples, pays the shop keeper and leaves. X BAD

Josh walks up to the man standing behind the rough oaken market stand. The sounds of a busy market can be heard all around him. An annoying fly buzzes around his head, so he absent-mindedly begins to inefficiently swat it away. “Ah, greetings shopkeeper! I was just browsing your wares.” The shopkeeper nods at Josh and then turns towards another customer to attempt to assist them the way all market shopkeepers must. Suddenly Josh felt a slight tugging sensation on his belt. He was about to brush it off as nothing, perhaps just someone bumping into him until he realised his belt was slightly lighter. He noticed a man beginning to run off in the opposite direction of himself. He glanced down to see that his coin purse was missing. He put two and two together and then shouted at the top of his lungs. “STOP THEIF!”… √ GOOD!

We expect that you write in full RP and that you write a full paragraph or more for each question.

If you have any questions about my feedback, or would like to create some constructive criticism about the way I give feedback (I.E am I being TOO blunt, or am I coming across rude) then please send me a message! I take all questions, none are stupid! :) You are not allowed to apply again for a full 24 hours.

[James Undercroft 129]

Moved to Denied Forum