Eenhoornheid's 2Nd App

[Lawrna 440]

Eenhoornheid's 2nd app

Out-Of-Character

1) Minecraft Account Name: Eenhoornheid

2) How old are you? I am 15 years old.

3) Time-Zone/Country of Residence: GMT +1/Belgium (the Dutch speaking part)

4) Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes, I was born in the US and l have lived there for eight years, I still speak/write English on a daily basis.

5) Small 2-3 sentence description of yourself: I am an easily amused and sometimes childish girl who doesn’t like any kind of hostility. I’m friendly (well, that is what people say) and I love to laugh.

6) How much time could you be on the server weekly?: I could go on daily for at least 2 hours except on Tuesday or on days I go out.

7) What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you: Roleplaying is acting out a story about someone’s life with the help of other people to personify said person.

8) What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?: I have been on a few RP servers, most of them were post-apocalyptic just because I could not find a decent fantasy server.

9) In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is: Meta-Gaming is when you use information that your character could never know, for example: I am targeted for an assassination but I don’t know by who, if the person who wants to kill me tells me this OOC the I cannot use this information IC.

10) In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is: Power-Gaming is not giving another person the chance to flee or force a certain situation to happen for instance, if someone wanted to capture me, he/she would have to give me a chance to resist and not immediately throw on shackles and a blindfold or lock me in a room.

11) What do you expect this server will be like?: I expect it to be something different, better and more fun than what I here fore experienced.

12) What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I played on The Land of Yalin, Aftermath and From Ashes. Yalin just stopped because the owner was having some family issues. Afermath changed to From Ashes after the previous owner wanted to file a lawsuit against the present owner and I’m still playing on From Ashes but it’s not the kind of RP I’m looking for.

13) Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes, I have.

14) Do you promise to abide said rules and laws? This includes the Server, Forum and Teamspeak set rules: Yes, wholeheartedly.

15) How did you hear about us?: Through friends of previous servers who now play on the server.

16) Have you previously made an Application> If so could you link us to your last Application?: Yes, I have: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/52060-eenhoornheids-1st-app/

In-Character

1) Character Name: Arya Orchid

2) What race are you? Elf

3) What Sub-Race are you? High Elf

4) Biography: Arya was born and raised in a far away village in a far away town called Grassheide, no one knew of this small farmer’s town because barely anyone lived there. Arya’s parents, Vernian and Ellesma, grandparents and the Rose family were the only inhabitants. Vernian wasn’t the kindest father, constantly drunk and hitting Arya for no apparent reason. Her father didn’t look like Arya at all, for she has long blond hair, dark blue eyes and natural pink lips. Ellesma was a spitting image of Arya, the same slender build and height, about 6 feet tall. Ellesma was nicer to Arya than her husband, but when Arya finally turned 50 she had enough and ran to the forests in the search for Haelun’or behind her house with only a bow, a quiver of arrows and some food in a small sac. She kept on running until she could run no more, she had found a little hut on a riverbank with a young human boy in it. The boy, Karl, had been banned from his village for treachery and theft. Arya, who had made an exception to be nice to another race, took him with her on her journey for the search of a home. After a few years, when Karl became 18 years of age, the duo still didn’t find a village and the young man was becoming ill, he passed on after a few days. Arya pushed on, stricken by grief, she roamed the lands in search of happiness. When Arya turned 75 years old she finally found a place to stay. The Batlard family, a human family, took her in with open arms, even though she hated other races. Their house was only a few miles from the Could Temple. Now she is 82 and she has just arrived at the Cloud Temple, looking for a home, a family and peace.

5) What is your Character’s ambitions?: Arya wants to have a big family and finally have a quiet life.

6) What is your character’s favorite tool? Because she brought her bow with her on her long journey, she became to love it.

7) What is one of your Character’s most skilled talents?: Archery, for the same reasons as above.

8) A screenshot of your skin: http://tinypic.com/r/dpxor8/5

9) Other information about your Character: She loves all things that live and never wants to get in fights. She has the habit of talking to herself and looking down while talking to someone, just because of her years of isolation in the wilderness left her weary of other people.

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?:

Arya: “HEY! Step away from him!”

The warriors look at Arya and one of them snorts

Warrior 1: “Like you, a woman, are going to do something about it?”

Arya narrows her eyes.

Warrior 2 laughs with Arya’s aggression.

The Halfling quivers with fear.

Halfling: “P-please, help me.”

One of the warriors takes out a knife and holds it against the halfling’s neck.

Warrior 2: “What are you going to do now lady?”

Arya: “Well, I have no idea, just look and see.”

Arya smiles and pulls out her bow and arrows.

Arya: “Do you understand now?”

The warrior lets go of the Halfling and the Halfling runs and hides behind Arya, Arya pulls back the bowstring.

Arya: “So, you have two options guys.One: You walk away and NEVER let this happen again or Two: you die.”

The warriors run for their pathetic lives and the Halfling hugs Arya.

“Thank you!”

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

Arya smiles and says: “Well hello! These are quite the wares you have here.”

Merchant: “Why thank you, I take great care of my products and customers!”

Arya looks around and asks the merchant: “Do you have any ‘special’ bows?”

The merchant raises his eyebrow and says: “So you’re one of them aye. As a matter of fact I do”

He pulls out a bow with infinite as enchantment, Arya’s mouth falls open.

The merchant chuckles and whispers: “For you it will only cost 30 minas…”

Arya smiles, gives the merchant 30 minas and says: “Nice doing business with you, sir.”

The merchant chuckles and says: “You have a nice day.” He tips his hat.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

Arya closes the chest again and looks around the house for the owner, the owner is in the back working in his garden.

Arya: “Hello dear sir! I couldn’t help but notice that your front door is open.”

The owner stands up and dusts off his clothes.

Owner: “Ah well, I have lost the key of the door yesterday.”

Arya: “But you do have so valuable stuff in there…”

Owner: “Oh! You went in my house!? Oh dear, I must find the key…”

Arya looks around in the garden and spots something shining near the bed of daisies.

Arya: “Isn’t it that there?”

The house owner looks to where Arya is pointing and picks up the key and chuckles.

Owner: “Why thank you! Here you get an iron bar for your effort and time.”

The owner gives Arya one of the iron bars from in the chest.

Arya: “No problem sir, have fun with your gardening!”

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

Arya smiles and says: “Hello! Would you guys maybe be so kind and give me a spare steak or bread.”

One of the traders whispers something to his friend to his left and they both snicker.

Trader 1: “Well, of course, why don’t you come to our tent?”

Arya backs up a bit and says: “Uhm, n-no thanks… It would be better to eat outside, it is a beautiful day.” And laughs nervously.

Trader 2: “Well, whatever you want, Miss…”

The trader gives Arya a steak and a small bottle of water.

Arya: “Thank you so much! Do you guys know where Haelun’or is, by any chance?”

Trader 3: “Oh it’s to the east, over there. About 50 miles…”

The trader points to the east while Arya eats and drinks ravenously.

Arya: “Thank you!”

She says while finishing up her meal and stands up.

Arya: “Thank you so much for your generosity but I am in a great haste. Farewell and may your trades be fair but in your favor.”

The traders say their goodbyes and Arya walks to the east, into the forest surrounding the small trading camp.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

Arya first refuses to kill the bandits but she is broke and really needs the money so she decides to help the guards. Arya positions herself on a tall building on the occupied road, she takes out her bow and arrows and takes aim on the leader. Suddenly Arya hears some commotion a bit further down the street and sees the guards charging the bandit camp. Arya pulls back the string and shoots the bandit leader before anyone could spot her. She takes out another arrow and aims it at a bandit who’s looking in her direction. The bandit flees for his pitiful life and others follow him. Suddenly Arya hears footsteps and heavy breathing behind her, she turns her head and sees one of the bandits standing a few yards away.

Bandit: “Well, you are the one who killed my brother! MY LEADER!”

The bandit charges at Arya but she quickly sidesteps and avoids his outburst of rage.

Arya: “Calm down! Now!”

The bandit, who collided with a wall, looks at Arya and starts weeping.

Bandit: “Why d-did you have to kill him.” He sways back and forth and falls from the building.

Arya yelps and looks over the side of the building and sees the bandits mangled body stretched over the pavement. Arya winces and looks around for the guards, it seems that no casualties have fallen and she climbs down the building to rejoin with her teammates.

[James Undercroft 129]

Your application has been denied.

Please use ALL the feedback that you are given.

Your skin and character as a whole isnt as accurate with high elves as I'd like. They normally have silver/golden blonde hair and are exceptionally regal and snooty. You seem far too humble and homely for that. Your character seems more of a wood elf. Apply those changes as you so wish.

I would like to add some points which I would like you to fix as well before we can accept you.

You seem to use very "gamey" language. Things like "Team Mates" and "Banned". The language people would use back in this time era is more like to be Comrades and Exiled respectively. Look through your entire application and fix this language please.

Your character seems a bit overpowered there. While you may have good skills with a bow, I hardly see how your character can just instantly kill the "leader" of the bandit attack with a single arrow. Arrows bounce off armour, miss critical points or just hit parts which wouldn't really damage the person all that much. From a distance it would be really difficult to just kill someone straight away, unless you had years and years of professional practise and training.

Your character might be extremely good with the bow but... just tone down the power of it a little bit.

The bandit whom you killed the alleged brother of reacts extremely unrealistically. I don't blame you if you do not understand the mindset of such people as we do not live in a society where we actively engage in people of that mindset all that often; so let me explain.

If you were to come across someone whom has lived their life killing people, stealing, robbing and pillaging; I really doubt that having their brother killed would make them burst into tears. Living that kind of life style would mean either they had a terrible childhood, in which they would have suffered worse horrors than having a mere brother killed --OR-- they turned to this life for what ever reason, and by living this life they would have again had experienced a lot worse things than a brother being killed.

The more likely reaction would be an intense anger in which they would never stop swinging until either you or they were dead.

If you wish to continue with the current mindset of this so-called bandit, I suggest you include some background information as to why he is such a wimp, even so it would have to be some really good justification.

If you have any questions about my feedback, or would like to create some constructive criticism about the way I give feedback (I.E am I being TOO blunt, or am I coming across rude) then please send me a message! I take all questions, none are stupid! :) You are not allowed to apply again for a full 24 hours.

[James Undercroft 129]

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