[Denied] Mshanks8202's App 2.0

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Out-Of-Character Details

Minecraft Account Name: Mshanks8202

How old are you?: 16

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:Pacific Standard Time, USA

Do you have a good grip on English grammar and the English language?: I am an Honors English Student.

Have you had any previous experience in roleplaying?: Not on any Minecraft servers but in other games yes.

Have you read and understood and agree to the rules?: Yes

How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?: Looked for a Minecraft RP Server.

Link any previous applications you have made to the Lord of the Craft: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/78751-d-mshanks8202s-app/

Have you posted this application on Minecraft Forum? If not, post it here: http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r-100-unique-gameplay/! : Okay.

Definitions

In your own words, define what the act of roleplaying is: Roleplaying is the act of assuming another identity common to internet goers.

In your own words, define what the act of meta-gaming is: Using real life information in game like the name floating above someones head.

In your own words, define what the act of power-emoting is: Power-Emoting is abusing the roleplaying system in a way not allowing them to react.. (i.e. Torgil steals Gore's amulet and then cuts off his head)

In-Character Details

Character Name: Thoth Quel'marow

Character Race: Elf (Dark Elf)

Character biography - Make this at least 2 paragraphs long, which must explain your character’s history, appearance, personality, age and any other details you deem necessary:

Thoth was an only child born to Parents who were scholars. They devoted all their time to their research with his happiest memory of them being the time when they had finished their work and read him a bed time story. His Father was not very loving twords him feeling that he was useless since he wasn't interested in their research and shipped him off to live with his Grandmother visiting once a week, then a month, then a year, and then he never seen them again. Life with his grandmother was better, she provided the love and compassion that he needed and he soon he was prospering. His grandmother was quite the Mystic and delved in the arts of healing, Soothsaying, and Scrying teaching him the arts. One day his grandmother took him into Malinor for his birthday and gave him 100 Minas to spend, he walked for a while until he found a custom made bow crafted by am old wood elf man. He bought it and soon became very proficient in archery. Soon he was killing game and bringing it home for his grandmother to cook. His grandmother soon started to teach him how to cook, what herbs to pick, and where to find him.

After a long while His grandmother became ill and he attempted to saver her through the arts she had taught him but alas it was to no avail and she soon passed. On his own he was very lonely and had no one else, he longed for that special someone with whom he could spend his life. On an outing to Malinor to buy some equipment he stopped at a tavern and met a very nice young High Elf bar-maiden. They hit it off and after three years got married and soon had little ones of their own. One day while he was out hunting he came across a group of mercenaries who were picking on a little wood elf. He walked up on them and asked what was going on, and it turned out that he had taken an apple from their camp. He offered to pay them for the apple but one of the mercenaries killed the little elf and then proceeded to advance on Thoth. He was shocked at their animosity and ran. They chased him to his home where he ran inside and hid his family. They lit his house on fire killing everyone inside except him...

After this experience he grew bitter twords the world, he rebuilt his home and lived there in solitude with the only people he talked to being the spirits of his dead family who had become stuck in our plane. He soon became obsessed with finding the mercenaries that did that to his family so they could finally be at peace. He used his power to find them and under the cover of night he killed them all. The spirit of one of the mercenaries became bound to him though in his effort and was cursed to fallow him around until he himself died while Thoth was simultaneous Cursed to never be able to kill another human again unless it is in self-defense or he is defending someone else. When he came home he was able to free his family and lay them to rest. The spirit Sithis soon became his reluctant companion and started to help him in his endevours. After achieving his goals he soon found himself alone in this big world with his only friend being a ghost and soon became cold and somewhat cruel to other people speaking his mind at all times regardless of social protocol.

What are your characters ambitions?: To achieve peace within himself and document the life of Sithis.

Please provide an in-game screenshot of your skin here: http://www.minecraftskins.com/skin/646146/dark-elf/

Is there anything else you would like to say about your character: He is a tad bit on the crazy side.

Open-Response-Questions

Each question here must be answered with a minimum of one full paragraph, and detail the scene you are given in the way it would happen in roleplay. These questions should be answered in first person. Be detailed, not short.

Upon entering the Mighty Human City of Arethor, you come across a shop-keeper calling out to sell his wares to passers-by. The shopkeeper is not a Human, he is a poor dwarf looking to make a living in a new city. What is your response?

Thoth sees the Dwarf and feels he should try and help the dwarf but seeing as to the fact he only uses bows which looks like something he doesn't have but decides to ask him anyways.

Thoth: Hello Dwarf, do you have any handcrafted bows?

Dwarf: Neh, I'm sorry but I'eh don't I'eh am a poor dwarve what de ye think I'd be sellin'?

Thoth: Well aren't you a rude little one... What do you think Sithis? *Looks over into the thin air*

Dwarf: Are ye all right lad?

Thoth: Sithis says you are small and smell... *looks over again*... and that I wasn't supposed to say that... well good day.

Dwarf: *Whispers to himself* I'eh think eh as a few screws loose in 'is head...

You’re wandering the Oren Road late at night, when a large Orc begins to threaten a nearby dwarf. There is no help nearby, and the situation looks like it will escalate into violence soon, what does your character do?

Thoth feels obligated to help but at the same time fears that he may have a repeat of what happened before with the mercenaries but decides to brave it anyways but is ready this time.

Thoth: *Draws Bow* Stand away from the Dwarf, Orc! *Has flash back to Incident with mercenaries.

Orc: Look Buddy I don't want any problems...

Thoth: I said step away from him! *Palms become sweaty*

Orc: Look I am sorry I'll leave...

Thoth: *Arrow slips and plunges into the Orc's chest* Oh my God!

Orc: *Screams*

Dwarf: *Wide Eyed* Thank you! *Bows then runs away*

Thoth: Hey come back here! *Runs to Orc*

Orc: I... I... I am sorry. *Eyes roll into the back of his head*

Thoth: *Slaps the Orc's face* Stay with me! Stay with me! * Rips arrow from the Orc's chest then applies pressure to his chest and chants words of healing*

Orc: *Opens Eyes and starts breathing shallowly* Thank... you...

Thoth: *Nurses the Orc back to health* Why were you cornering that Dwarf?

Orc: I was hired to kill him by his Father-in-law...

Thoth: Why?

Orc: *Shrugs* I have no idea? *Stands up and bows and then walks away* Thank you!

Whilst walking down the road to Malinor, you stumble upon an old man. His walking stick , looks weak and frail, and just as you are about to ask something, the stick breaks, and the man falls to the ground. As he falls down, a bag of Minas falls to the ground, and splits open. As you watch the multiple coins spill out, you peer down at the defenceless man. What does your character do?:

The old man reminds Thoth of his grandmother and he decides to help.

Thoth: Allow me to help you... *Helps the man up then collects his money*

Old Man: Thank you young man.

Thoth: *Chuckles* I am not young but thank you I am probably older than you.

Old Man: *Looks closer* Oh so you must be one of them Dark Elves! *Looks at him in aw*

Thoth: What did you think I was?

Old Man: Kids these days... I just figured you painted yourself I mean you look like you are in your late teens early twenties...

Thoth: Why thank you sir. *Walks over to tree and pulls off branch* Here sir use this.

Old Man: Why thank you I must be off. *Walks off Waiving*

[Taiga 764]

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Role Play:

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-Insufficient Information in Metagaming Definition [ ]

-Insufficient Information in Powergaming Definition [ ]

-Insufficient Knowledge on Role Play [ ]

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-Fabricated Places/Large-Scale Events [ ]

-Unreal Scenarios [ ]

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Requires a Villain Application [X]

Open Ended Responses Require Elaboration [X]

Did not post on MinecraftForums [ ]

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Skin:

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Other Comments:

Well, as mentioned before, Killing isn't something you are allowed to do in a regular application. It proves that you are already a villain, and thusly, have a villain application.

Also, try to make your ORQs into a book-like format. It looks to be a play of sorts and has very minimal descriptions of what you do. Instead of typing

"-nurses back to health-"

try doing something like:

"Taking a bandage from my pack, I begin to wrap his arm, covering his crimson-red wound with a white layer."

Good luck on your next application!

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If you have any Questions or concerns, feel free to send a Private Message to my account!

Noteworthy Hints and Resources:

You come to Asulon to Develop a Character, not have one Developed already

Just because you play RPG's, doesn't mean you have RPed before.

Don't post another application in a period of one (1) day. It clogs up the applications section, and doesn't prove to us that you have improved upon your application.

Definition of Metagaming and Powergaming : http://sm-rp.forumotion.com/t32-powergaming-metagaming-ic-and-ooc

Definition of Power-Emoting: http://www.wowwiki.com/Power-emoting

[Taiga 764]

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