[Denied]Sulsagamer's Application

[sulsagamer 0]

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Out-Of-Character Information
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: sulsagamer
How old are you?: 14
Time-Zone: US, Mountain Time
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes, I have rad and agreed to the rules.
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I have had a account on your server before and want to play on it again.
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: I heard about it long ago on youtube.
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:  http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/85277-sulsagamers-application/
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):
Have you read the Human lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes, I have read the lore and I will follow it in my biography.

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: Acting like a different character instead of yourself. Taking on their personality and mood.
Meta-gaming: Using information you know outside the game to use to your advantage in the game.
Power-emoting: Emoting something that doesn't give the other person a chance to do anything about it. Example: *Takes 100 gold from Bob's pocket*

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Sulrek Hoodson
Current Age: 22
Sub-race (if any): Northern
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): I was born and raise in Oren. My father loved fighting, it was what he did for fun. My mother was warm hearted and kind. She always tried to help when she could. I was 11 years old when my dad started teaching me how to handle a sword and bow. By 15 I was pretty good. I could protect myself when I found myself in bad situations. When I was 17 my mother died of sickness. Me and my father tried our best to try and cure her but it was no use. My father was never the same. He stop fighting and instead fancied quietly fishing or cooking. When I was 21 my father died from old age and I was left alone with no family.
Ambitions for the Future: I want to be one of the best warriors Asulon has ever seen.
Personality: I am brave, noble, and always ready for adventure. If you need someone to tag along on your adventure I'm the guy to go to. I am a kind person who won't attack unless it is needed.
Skills: I am great with swords and good with a bow. I have amazing unarmed skills that let me be able to defend myself well even without a sword.
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): I am a Northern with pale skin and orange hair. I wear dark lether shoes and light lether pants and shirt. I am 5ft 11in tall with a muscular build. I have deep blue eyes and a short beard that circles around my lips. My clothes would be be clean and not worn. My shirt would have a cut down the middle which would be held together by a belt made of black leather with a silver buckle.
Any other details you wish to share about your character:

Open-Response-Questions
Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.
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1. Whilst in the mighty human capital you notice a dark-clothed figure stealthily making his way towards the Emperor’s palace - he is clearly up to no good. There are guards within shouting distance - what do you do?

Answer: I would walk over to him and ask him what he was up to. He would reply nothing much. I would persist and ask where are you heading? He would say nothing and contiune to move away from me. I would grab his shoulder and say why in such a hurry? He would turn around and take out a dagger. He would swipe at me and I would dodge it and punch him in the nose, causing his eyes to water. I would then upper cut him, knocking him out and then getting the guards to deal with him from there.

2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest you come across a large clearing, in which sits a small cobbled cottage. Outside it stands an unstable old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two heavily armed bandits - they appear to be threatening him. You are armed with leather armour and an iron longsword, how do you react?

Answer: I would approach quietly and listen in. After I knew the old man was in danger I would sneak a bit closer, pick up a rock and chuck it at one of them. The bandit who washit would turn around and tell his friend he had been hit by a rock coming from my direction. They would approah my hiding spot. I would back circle around and through another rock at the other bandit. They would then move to where THAT rock had come from. I would then start to back up, taking good care that they couldn't see me. When they were around where I was before I would chuk another rock at them. They would advance and I would keep backing up. I would contiune this a few more times then back up and slip away to go back on my path to where I was going.

3. You are standing within the mighty human capital when you notice a small man standing behind a colourful stall. You approach the stall and notice that the man is selling a variety of general goods - he says that he is selling just about anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to allow you to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling, items of choice and the discussion that happens).

Answer: I would approach this man and ask if he had any iron swords or bows I could buy. He would say that depends, how much money are you willing to pay for them? I would say I'm not saying that untill I see them. He would then bring them out and show them to me. They looked in good condition, maybe worth 100 minas for both of them. I would say I'll give you 75 for both of them. The man would then say how about 90? I would then offer 80 for both of them. The man would presist an say 85 minas for both of them. I would think about it for a moment and then say that sounds good. He would hand me the sword and bow and I would hand me the 85 minas. I would then say Goodbye and contiune on with my daily tasks.

[cruzazul 2815]

Though you did improve from your last few attempts you did not expand on many of the things I told you needed changed from your previous app. Here are the things that need to be improved in the future.

Though you did expand on your biography some it still needs to be filled with more lore and have more of a story in it. There is still a lack of lore in parts of it that should be improved upon.

Your ORQs still show power emoting. You describe that your character is so strong he could take on anyone and win. I feel that you may want to put some parts in it that show weaknesses in your character as well instead of just highlighting how strong and talented he is.

The first ORQ is still short in length, it needs to be longer and like the other to limited on the power emoting.

Your application needs to be posted on the minecraft forums, which can be found here: http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-anthos-officially-t-h-e-1-roleplay-server/page__st__2700

Post a picture of your character's skin in the appearance section so we can make sure it is lore and server friendly.

You may reapply in 24 hours of this denial.

If you have any questions don't be afraid to shoot me a PM.

[cruzazul 2815]

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