[Denied]Dwarf Application (3Rd Try)

[qwertyhim513 1]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and
ensure the essential details are accurate.



Minecraft Account Name:pearsonflynn

How old are you?: 14

Time-Zone:Eastern Time

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?:yes

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I have no experience of
role-playing before.

How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: I watched a youtuber play
it.

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:http://www.lordofthe...rf-application/

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do
so (link above):no

Have you read the Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and
follow it in your biography?:yes



Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions
from elsewhere!:



Role-playing:playing a role or topic in a game. For example, a haughty noble would be scornful to those below him.

Meta-gaming:using the knowledge of a game to influence your decisions. IN Dungeons and Dragons, if you don't see a trap, your character has a high chance to fall for it.

Power-emoting: forcing your will on someone else without their consent. An example of power-emoting is what Pol Pot forced down into the throats of his fellow Cambodians.



In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character:



Full Name:Pearson

Current Age:20

Sub-race (if any):none

Clan (if any):none

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

 

The Stone Shield dwarves were a mighty clan who ruled the far north.Though the dwarves were renown for their might in combat, a long peacetime have softened their muscles. Once twelve full moon has passed since the creation of Mongoose Country, an Orc raid overtook the Stone Shields. Caught off guard, the dwarves were forced to fight, some even unarmed. Though they fought valiantly, the dwarves were quickly overcome with sheer numbers. 

 

Only a handful of dwarves managed to escaped, carrying the children to safety. For years, the children dwarves hid in an abandoned mine, surviving of maggots. Among the surviving dwarves, Pearson was one of those who were unfortunate to have witness the death of his or her parrents. The handful of elders who escaped, took care of the children as their own. But even dwarves can not escape the power of age. When the death of Gradula, the last elder, had died, the surviving children swore to avenge their clan. Among those who joined Pearson were Raduca, Leytra, Nulic, and Dragurn.

 

Dragurn, soon forgotten his vows. His desire for revenge was too strong. Eventually the other dwarves were forced to slay Dragurn, for he was mad for power. He would have killed the others, if they did not slay him. Dragurn thought that those with nothing to lose would be stronger. He planned to assasinate his fellow friends in order to achieve greater strength. Luckily, the others found out and managed to stop Dragurn's mad plan. During his burial rite, the other dwarves made another promise. They would rather slay themselves than to kill their friends.

 

Raduca, Leytra, Nulic, and Pearson kept their vows and eventually met up with other fellow dwarves who embarked on the same quest. One their first encounter though, due to their inexperience, Raduca and Leytra died while slaying an Orc mercenary camp. However, Pearson and Nulic, witnessing the death of their friends, chose to be more careful next time. They met up with fellow member of Mongoose Country, training till they were ready.

 

However. Nulic, still felt sorrow for his friend. He often would have nightmares about their deaths. Eventually he could not distinguish his thoughts and reality. He left a letter to Pearson, then hung himself. Overcame with sorrow Pearso's hatred to the Orcs. He blamed the Orcs and swore to eliminate the threat of evil Orcs.

 

 

Ambitions for the Future:
Pearson desires to create a noble guild of dwarfs to squash injustice. He wishes to rebuild the Stone Shields and to strike revengance on the Orcs who overtook his former clan.

 

Personality:Pearson is usually a somewhat affable dwarf. Yet, when he is struck with the memmories of his fallen comrades, he becomes solitary and filled with rage. He is distrusting towards any Orc.

Skills: Pearson is skilled in combat and a somewhat good archer.

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):http://www.minecraft.../dwarf-warrior/

Any other details you wish to share about your character: He likes to
explore and discover new things.



Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be answered with a
minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore
at any point.

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1. Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you
see a large deposit of diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There is a
very thin rock bridge that looks precariously unstable, but it is the
only way to access the deposit. What do you do?



Answer: Pearson feels the allure of wealth in the mines as all young dwarfs
should. He goes to the nearest town and searched for a ropesmith. Once finding one, he asked him to sell him a good quality grappling hook. The ropesmith had none left though, but he did have some useful information. Apparently there were some spiders who made their nest in Kalos who could spin web so fine and strong, that they rivaled the strength of steel. 

 

Pearson went into one of their nests as instructed by the ropesmith. He then brought out his iron pickaxe. He then carefully used it to rub the backs of the sleeping spiders. Like magic, a thin robe of web flowed out of the spiders end. Then as soon as he stopped rubbing, the web stopped and cut off. However, one of the spiders many eyes blinked. Seeing an intruder it called upon its brethren and attacked Pearson. Grabbing the rope in one hand, he quickly made his exit to above ground. Once in the presence of the sun the spiders stopped chasing him. Yet they continued to hiss at him.

 

Having the fine web, he quickly made a noose at one end and lassoed it onto the other side of the ravine. The he swung and landed on one of the many perches of the other side. He then parquored to the top and witnessed the sight of diamonds. He then spent a dozen weeks mining there. Once the rich diamond vein was gone, he returned to the surface, now a wealthy dwarf.

2. You are sitting in the local tavern with a
large pint of ale in your hand - sitting nearby you is a
rather young dwarf whom is clearly going through a bad time. He is crying
to himself, and clutching a small wooden hammer toy. In the
other corner of the room two shady dwarves are sitting whispering to each
other and pointing occasionally at the dwarf. They stand up, one with a
small dagger in his hand and beginto approach the young
dwarf. What do you do?



Answer: Pearson swiftly and silently moves to the corner of a tavern. From underneath his cloak, Pearson draws his bow. When the two shady dwarves yell at the crying dwarf to follow them. The young dwarf refused, and thus was dragged by the shady dwarfs outside. Following outside, Pearson soon witness the two shady dwarves trying to steal some money. With a yell, Pearson launched anarrow into one of the dwarf's shoulder. The stuck dwarf let out a shriek of pain. Following the sound of the yell, the unharmed shady dwarf charged at Pearson. However, he was too late, and an arrow was sheathed into his skull.The surviving shady dwarf immediately ran away, leaving a trail of blood. Pearson let him go, more concerned with the crying dwarf, The crying dwarf turned out to be the only dwarf to survive an Orc raid in his village. 

 

After conversing with the dwarf, Pearson found they both had a common enemy. They decided to join forces and help rid the land of tyranical Orcs. With one more dwarf to join his band, Pearson found hope in his future goal.

3. Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you
hear a voice call out to you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’get ye’rself
an ale!”. You spin on your heel and see a heavily bearded
bar-owner looking at you - a huge grin on his face, and a
mug of ale in his hand. How do you react?



Answer: Pearson gruffly accepted. While drinking some ale, pearson asked if there was any trouble in the countryside. The barkeeper, took a long swill then replied, "aye, you must be one of those travelers from the great raids." 

"Great raids?"

"The Orcish raids which tore apart many dwarves from their clans."

"How did you know I was one of them?"

"I didn't, but I had my suspisions when I saw the fire in you eyes. Your question confirmed it."

 

Taking time to think what he just heard, he asked the barkeeper, "do you know any others?" The barkeeper replied with a nod. However, he placed hi hands on foward in a stopping motion before Pearson could open his mouth again, Answering Pearson's question glance the barkeeper said," many of them are on the brink of madness. It would be better if you left them alone. Others prefer to just forget about it and live in the present." 

 

Pearson angrily slammed his mug down on the bar table.

"How could anyone choose to live on? They killed and enslaved families!"

"True, but some worry that if they go on, they would be hit with madness. Surely you have met one of those, haven't you?"

 

Pearson could not reply. The death of his friends due to madness was too much. He cried himself uncontrollably. The barkeeper chose to leave him alone, knowing what he went through.Wakening with sore eyes the next days, he rubbed sleep from his eyes."The drink if on the house, if you ever need a place to open up, come here." Pearson thanked the barkeeper and the two shook hands. Pearson promised when the evil Orcs are gone, he would come back and share a drink.

[ski_king3 0]

 

Your meta-gaming and power-emoting definitions still need considerable work, both in their definitions and examples.

 

Also, what is the Stone Shields and Mongoose Country? To the best of my knowledge, you are essentially creating a Kingdom which otherwise does not exist. In general, you really aren't supposed to do that. Also, this bio in general just seems a bit unrealistic, with the massive tragedy and the very... odd circumstances. I don't know how to explain it, it just doesn't seem to quite make sense to me. I would suggest spending more time looking over the dwarven lore before reapplying, as you also used next to none of that.

 

Also, your first ORQ seems entirely unrealistic. The spiders and the sudden attack, as well as just the general series of events in that ORQ do not really make much sense to me. I would suggest entirely rewriting that. Also, your second ORQ is borderline use of villainy, something your character cannot do without a VA. You must treat your ORQ's as actual RP scenarios, and as such cannot commit villainous acts.

 

If you have any questions, feel free to PM me. You may reapply 24 hours after the post below this one.

[ski_king3 0]

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