[Denied][Half-Orc] Firedragoner's Application

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[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: Firedragoner
How old are you?: 15
Time-Zone:  UTC +8
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes.
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: Not much, but I have looked around a couple of role-play forums before.
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: Internet.
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: N/A
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): Yes.
Have you read the Orcish lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes.

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: The portrayal of a unique or known character usually from fiction, with the "player" assuming the role of the character.
Meta-gaming: Using information that is not known to your character to benefit yourself, for example if you know how to do complex calculations, or you know the entire map of the game world, but your character is a poor farmer not educated in many things.
Power-emoting: Acting or doing something that the other person does not have the chance to reply to or act: e.g. "I leap upon my enemy and severely wound him, and then scramble away without harm."

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Graarg Wymond Wintersmith
Current Age: 22
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): The Kru Clan was not really a clan. It was just a small tribe of orcs who had grouped together in order to survive the perils of the desert. They roamed the desert, setting up camp at small oases. But their existence came and went like the wind; one day they disappeared into the desert. Nobody heard of them again.

There were rumors that in a human village near the border of the Orcish nation there was an affair. An orc had supposedly been with a young woman. But when investigators reached the house, there was nothing left inside the house but sand quietly swirling about the floor.

Months later, with all memory of this incident gone, an old farmer and wife despaired. They were much past the age of pregnancy, and they did not have a heir.  But one night, there was a knock on the door. And there was soft wailing at the door.

They named him Wymond, a human name which meant "battle protector". It signified his sturdiness and strength, which he displayed at a young age. Wymond helped out around the farm, but he didn't understand why his parents wouldn't let him play with the other children.

Fifteen years later, the old couple died peacefully, and left the entire farm under his ownership. But when the contractor found  that the farm was now run by a half-orc, he immediately terminated the contract. And so this way Wymond set out into the world to find a job and a goal in life. Adopting the name "Graarg" for use in speaking to orcs, he hopes to find others like him or a culture that will accept him.

Ambitions for the Future: To find a society that accepts him, as well as find out who his real parents were.
Personality: Graarg holds a very wary perspective of all those around him, as he knows how half-orcs are hated in all the nations. However, if he finds someone trustworthy, he does not hesitate to open up to them. Because of this, he may be considered naïve in some aspects, as staying on the farm for most of his life did not let him experience much of the world.

Skills: Because of working in his foster-father's farm, he knows basic sowing, tilling and harvesting. He also knows how to manage livestock, mainly taking care of the pigs at home. In addition, he also enjoys reading, even if only signposts are available nearby. He had gone to see a mentor who has been teaching him how to write. He has also been taught to wield a weapon to defend himself and the farm, but aside from basic training he is not an expert swordsman.

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): Graarg is very pale skinned for a green orc, with a slightly blue-greenish shade. His tusks are much less protruding and smaller than the average orc. His height is also much closer to a human than an orc, and he is less muscular than what you might find in a regular orc soldier. Being adopted by farmers he does not have much money, and his clothes reflect this.

(Skin made by me)
Any other details you wish to share about your character: N/A

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]
[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]
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[b]1. You are roaming the mighty capital of the War Nation Of Uruks, as you near the Arena you spot an Orc, wearing what seems to be human garbs as he looks at you he smiles and say out loud in common not in blah “Come friend let me teach you of civilization and break your mind from this orcish savagery!”, how do you react?[/b]

Answer: Graarg turns his head, uninterested and growls in a low voice: "You don't need to." The orc, astounded by his good pronunciation turns around and flees. It turns out he was in fact a con-man trying to get victims into a secluded alley. Graarg shakes his head and walks away.

 

[b]2. As you are watching an Arena fight between two Orcs, the Goj of Krug walks towards the Arena, and shouts “Mi brudderz da Feztivel ob Krug iz coummeh! We needz zacrifizez tu zummun da Zpirit ob Krug un diz uzg, go gadder da Warbandz nd raid da landz nd bring mi buck zacrifizez, twiggy nd pinky dat we kan zlauhater upun da alter ob Krug nuw go mi Brudderz!” How do you react to this?[/b]

Answer: Seeing the Goj walk into the Arena shouting an announcement in blah, Graarg pulls his cloak closer around him and sneaks away, in fear of his pale skin being noticed and thereafter captured for being whitewash. He accidentally bumps into a hooded stranger, with his face obscured from the light. Heart pounding, he hastily apologizes and backs away. The figure then falls over revealing two young goblins messing around.

 

[b]3. As you are travelling in the barren Orcish deserts you come across a quiet oasis. Beside it sits a small tent where a young orc is preparing a meal of roasted halfling. He calls you over, offering you to join in with his meal. What does your character do?[/b]

Answer: Feeling extremely hungry after a long trek in the desert, Graarg cautiously approaches, using a blah accent to avoid detection as a half-orc. He sits down next to the youth and eyes him warily, but still accepts the meal graciously. After a while of silence, they have a hearty conversation concerning the extremities of the desert. Concluding the warm meal, he bids the orc farewell, finally feeling full after a couple of days in the barren wasteland.

[ski_king3 0]

 

While this is a pretty good application overall, there are a few issues which need to be addressed before you can be accepted onto our server. However, I really like this character, and think he will make a very interesting one to roleplay.

 

Alright, so I would never deny for this, however, I think it ought to be said. The way this app was posted, with the odd white background, makes it incredibly hard to read and judge. As such, I would  perhaps copy your application into a notepad document before pasting it here to remove any weird backgrounds. If you don't understand what I mean, I can explain it more in depth in PM's.

 

Now, onto actual important things. While your bio was rather good, I'd like to see more on the development of your character and what actually happened to him, rather than leading up to his birth. By all means, keep that bit, but add more in regards to your character's development, and in general expand on the biography. Also, make sure to use a bit more server lore in your biography, such as town and city names or important figures, as this allows us knowledge that you actually are familiar with Lord of the Craft's lore.

 

In regards to your orc's personality, there is one aspect which should be present in all orc descendants that you have not mentioned. I will leave you with this wiki page. I would advise reading through it, as it will enlighten you on a lot of our server's lore, as well as this specific aspect, if you read carefully enough. But seriously, it's a good read, read it regardless.

 

Your ORQ's could also use some expanding, as they're a bit short. Also, your character should have at least some difficulty speaking normally due to his tusks.

 

If you have any questions, feel free to PM me. You may reapply 24 hours after the time on the post below this one.

[ski_king3 0]

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