[Denied] My Second Application Attempt

[BradySPlaysMC 0]

What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: BradySPlaysMC

How old are you?: 11

Are you aware the server is PG-13 (You won’t be denied for being under 13): yes

Have you read and agreed to the rules?: yes

What’s the rule you agree with the most?: Do not change your username to anything which could be offensive, vulgar, or inflammatory, on any LotC medium. Breaking this rule will result in a ban of 30 days (the amount of time it takes to change your name via Mojang). Impersonating a player/staff member will result in a more severe punishment.

Are there any rule(s) that confuse you or don’t make sense?(If so we can help clear it up! You will not be denied for having a question on the rules): No

How did you find out about Lord of the Craft? A person told me about it over the web.

 

Definitions

Feel free to Google the answers or browse our forums, but make sure that you write the reply in your own words, not those of another website or person!

 

What is roleplaying?: Roleplaying is acting out the characteristics of a character.

What is metagaming?: Metagaming is using imformation that a character does not know or would know at the time.

What is powergaming?: Powergaming is a way a character is powerful in his actions but does not give me other person a chance to do a action..

 

In-Character Information

Now you actually make your character - be creative but stay reasonable! Make sure they make sense and that they follow lore. Try to come up with a character that you actually want to play.

 

Character’s name:Brady

Character’s sex: Male

Character’s race: Human

Character’s age: 18 

Biography  (Please make it a decent two paragraphs long. Remember to add server lore, and events that happened to your character so that they don’t contradict history.): I am a 18 year old boy named Brady who was born to a family in the town of Montford.

I was raised to become a worker and work in the mines of Montford. When I was 8 my mother was having another baby. She died giving birth to my brother Cayden. We lived with our father until he died in the mines of Montford by inhaling too much dust. Me and my brother stowed away on a ship and sailed away. My brother and me got off the ship and adventured into the vast world. I took a hatchet from the ship and started cutting down trees to build a fire. I built the fire and when I went back to the ship for supplies like food and water it was gone! I went back and told my little brother to follow me and search for berry bushes. We found the berries but something else with it. We found an abandoned house and my brother and I entered the house. The house had supplies like food and water and it had a chest which held a sword. I put the sword on my belt along with my hatchet and set off for a town to buy supplies.

     My brother and I walked for days until we found a tiny village. We snuck into a house and stole some mutton and milk.  My brother fell behind and got lost.  I searched for days and I was certain that he was dead.  It proved to be right when I found his body 7 days later marked with claw marks like wolves attacked him and left him for death. I continued my journey without my brother and stumbled upon another village. One of the humans living there was a kind mother of 2 and she noticed me and took me in. She was part of a royal family and her husband trained me to become a knight. They put me on a ship and sent me off to the cities of Vailor. I stumbled upon a castle and applied to become a knight. It is now 1540 and I have a long journey ahead of me. That is the end of my biography right now.

                                                                                                                                            Signed,

                                                                                                                                                          BradySPlaysMC

Personality Traits: I am a game geek and I am very intelligent.

Ambitions: I want to be able to become an inventor and make robots that can do your homework for you.

Strengths/Talents: I am able to do math problems quickly and I play multiple musical instruments.

Weaknesses/Inabilities: I am very sensitive so if any one says a mean thing to be I cry. I am unable to write with my left hand.

Appearance (List the extra details of your characters appearance, IE; height & weight): I am 5 foot 5 inches and weight 142 pounds. I wear a diamonds sword on my back and have red hair. I also have brown eyes.

Appearance, please provide us a screenshot of your character’s skin (If you need help, see our screenshot guidehere): idk how to do a copy and paste screenshot so just take my character lay out.

Edited 19 hours ago by BradySPlaysMC

 

[Crowbill 493]

Under review.

[Crowbill 493]

Unfortunately, you have been denied for following reasons:

• Your defintions are vague. Please expand on them. Feel free to use our wiki page about roleplaying here! https://wikia.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Roleplaying
• Except the mentioning of Vailor, no other lore is used. Please add more to it. Feel free to use our wiki about our current realm Vailor for more info! https://wikia.lordofthecraft.net/index.php?title=Vailor
• Your current story seems like a cliche (the whole dead family thing). Could you please work on your story a bit more?
• You can't be connected to a royalty in any way.
• You're missing proper personality traits. This helps build our your character!
• Robots do not exists in our current universe. Could you add some proper ambitions.
• Your strengths and weaknesses are not even. Please add more to them (Not able to write with your left hand is not a proper weakness!).
• Your skin does not match our servers theme which is very similar to Lord of the Rings.

Fear not, as you may re-apply in 24 hours. Feel free to contact me or any other AT via forums or Teamspeak if you need help!

[Crowbill 493]

Moved to Denied Application Forum.