[Denied]Application Dwarf Ignotis

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Out-Of-Character Information Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate. Minecraft Account Name:Ian Smith How old are you?: 13 Time-Zone: Eastern Standard Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: SWTOR How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: In my minecraft clan Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:N/A Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):Yes Have you read the Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes Definitions In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!: Role-playing: Role playing is acting as something you are not such as a super hero. Meta-gaming: Using knowledge you would not have as your character. For instance if your friends warn you of a traitor you randomly kill this person with no reason. Power-emoting: Forcing your the actions of your character on to others. For instances Bobby speaks the magic words and all fall to their knees and listen to his every command. In-Character Information: Complete the following biography on your character: Full Name: Ignotis (Unknown) Current Age: estimated 9 seasons old Sub-race (if any):Cave Dwarf Clan (if any): Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): Not much is known about Ignotis' early life. Ignotis was pulled out of a pile of rubble outside Kal'Azgoth at the age of around 7 seasons. He has no recollection of anything before this time. A man (assumed to be his father) was also pulled out. He was dead. It is thought that the two were mining in this' remote area for rare minerals when the tunnel collapsed. After this he is given food and was provided with some money and a first name. Without a clan he sets out to find a place where he belongs. Now he has a great fear of mining and will not under any circumstance go into the mines. Somewhere in his past he must have been training as an engineer or builder because now Ignotis is most comfortable building. It is his only connection to the past. It also keeps him out of the mines. He runs a shop where he creates custom inventions. However business has not been coming lately and he is frustrated he wants to make a change in the world. He wants to be remembered. Ambitions for the Future: Find his mother if she is still alive, Build equipment of all sorts from farming to military and make a living with his passion. Fit in. Be great (be remembered) Personality: Generally friendly but if you have acute senses you might notice a scar still unhealed from the trauma of the accident. Sometimes distant. Brash and inexperienced in the workings of the world due to his adolescence. Skills: Building can build military equipment and other devices. Keen mind. Can use a sword but is by no means a skilled swordsman. Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): Height 4'5 Eye Color: Amber Braided Beard http://i.imgur.com/ZyiLcpI.png Any other details you wish to share about your character: Open-Response-Questions Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point. ____ 1. Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you see a large deposit of diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There is a very thin rock bridge that looks precariously unstable, but it is the only way to access the deposit. What do you do? A large deposit of diamonds sits tantalizingly close across that treacherous sone bridge. Ignotis decides that the risk is worth the reward and he calls upon his to friends. "Ye will get half profit for insuring my safety. . By using a safety rope recently created by Ignotis they help him across. The cross over passes with no incident and he mines out the deposit. However on the way back the bridge crumbles. Ignotis curses "Gailuk" as he is left hanging in the middle of the canyon. However his friends manage to reel him back to safety. Answer: 2. You are sitting in the local tavern with a large pint of ale in your hand - sitting nearby you is a rather young dwarf whom is clearly going through a bad time. He is crying to himself, and clutching a small wooden hammer toy. In the other corner of the room two shady dwarves are sitting whispering to each other and pointing occasionally at the dwarf. They stand up, one with a small dagger in his hand and begin to approach the young dwarf. What do you do? Ignotis steps between the scum and the innocent boy and draws his sword hoping to not have to use it. He knows if it comes down to it he will lose a fight. Ignotis has only one option, intimidation. So he bellows "If either of you cowards dare touch this boy then I think you will find it hard to enjoy your gains with your heads sitting separated from your shoulders". The two dwarfs look at each other then at Ignotis one sheathes the dagger and then they both bolt quicker than lightning. The boy says "Do ye have anythin at all to give" Ignotis gives him money and then leaves, there is nothing more he can do for the boy. Answer: 3. Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you hear a voice call out to you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’ get ye’rself an ale!”. You spin on your heel and see a heavily bearded bar-owner looking at you - a huge grin on his face, and a mug of ale in his hand. How do you react? After seeing the bar owner Ignotis follows him back into his bar. There are men drinking away the troubles of the day. The bar owner hands Ignotis a mug and he chugs it down. When he finishes he shouts "The next round is on me"! Who knows how many drinks later he staggers his way home singing all the way. Answer:

[Princeton 396]

 

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- Unfortunately, I am going to have to deny this -

 

Firstly, I would like you to expand upon your biography a bit. Mention your fathers clan and mothers name (Even if your character doesn't know), also I would like to know where your character learned engineering and such.

 

Secondly and lastly, your ORQ's could benefit from more detailed descriptions and dialogue. Although they weren't bad, I would like you to go into detail what your character says and does. Really paint a scene with descriptions of your surroundings and outcomes.

 

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[Princeton 396]

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