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[DarkParty 73]

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Edited October 31, 2025 by Salmon Fry
It broke lore and was overpowered

[Metamancy 1765]

I think you need a better understanding of both how the void works and how magic/crp balancing on LOTC works. To summon a voidal being, or even a "monstrosity," is not something a single person is able to do, even with the dedication of all their magic slots. It takes several mastered mages just to open a voidal tear.

I'm not a lore nerd, but I can definitely tell you that you are severely underestimating the power of voidal beings. A minor voidal being became an entire ST event (The Chromaweave.) It's a cool concept, but just doesn't work in the current lore of LOTC. You can't just "capture" someone's soul with the void.

Also, this is incredibly unbalanced - 7 emotes to summon something basically unkillable and immediately wins you the crp? It just doesn't make sense.

But, this is a cool submission! Don't be deterred if this isn't accepted; just keep at it, keep writing because your writing is brilliant, and just learn the nuances of LOTC lore and crp balancing over time. 

Hope this helps! 

[Cheese 8882]

Don't let Prima see this one

 

As Metamancy said though, while this is a really creative idea, I don't think this is entirely balanced at ALL, in that many of these spells that can very critically (or even kill) someone are tier 1 and only 4 emotes. Also, dedicating 5 slots to voidal magic isn't much of a drawback and is also INSANE for a voidal feat; even voidstalkers, which are meant to be closer to the void than other mages, only require 3 slots. 

 

I also worry that the mechanics and redlines aren't thoroughly written out. There seems to be no mention of how to even achieve this feat. Is it a ritual? Do you need a TA? Is it granted by ST only? The spells also aren't well explained and the redlines don't cover a whole lot. You summon an entire voidal horror and the only rules are that you're a little slower and can't cast anything else? There needs to be more structure or people either won't know how to use the spell correctly, or they'll abuse it and powergame it.

 

Also, being able to alter and shape your soul on a whim in combat is INSANE, and being able to go right back to how you were before is also crazy. Like metamancy said, how do you get a soul? You can't take that without a PK, which you're not able to enforce nor extract with the void. Being able to insta kill someone with any spell is also generally disallowed with voidal magic. What happens to the soul post-spell? All souls go somewhere in the afterlives save for voidstalkers who escape to the infinite. 

 

Overall, there are just too many problems with this one to even pend and edit until it's fixed (I literally only skimmed like 3 paragraphs and it's a lot oopsie). I think it was super creative, but as it is it's not sustainable for this server and I don't think any amount of voidal veteran or ST feedback would be able to fix it. Sorry hun, but best of luck to any future pieces you write!

[PrimnyaQuorum 3999]

2 minutes ago, Cheese said:

Don't let Prima see this one

 

As Metamancy said though, while this is a really creative idea, I don't think this is entirely balanced at ALL, in that many of these spells that can very critically (or even kill) someone are tier 1 and only 4 emotes. Also, dedicating 5 slots to voidal magic isn't much of a drawback and is also INSANE for a voidal feat; even voidstalkers, which are meant to be closer to the void than other mages, only require 3 slots. 

 

I also worry that the mechanics and redlines aren't thoroughly written out. There seems to be no mention of how to even achieve this feat. Is it a ritual? Do you need a TA? Is it granted by ST only? The spells also aren't well explained and the redlines don't cover a whole lot. You summon an entire voidal horror and the only rules are that you're a little slower and can't cast anything else? There needs to be more structure or people either won't know how to use the spell correctly, or they'll abuse it and powergame it.

 

Also, being able to alter and shape your soul on a whim in combat is INSANE, and being able to go right back to how you were before is also crazy. Like metamancy said, how do you get a soul? You can't take that without a PK, which you're not able to enforce nor extract with the void. Being able to insta kill someone with any spell is also generally disallowed with voidal magic. What happens to the soul post-spell? All souls go somewhere in the afterlives save for voidstalkers who escape to the infinite. 

 

Overall, there are just too many problems with this one to even pend and edit until it's fixed (I literally only skimmed like 3 paragraphs and it's a lot oopsie). I think it was super creative, but as it is it's not sustainable for this server and I don't think any amount of voidal veteran or ST feedback would be able to fix it. Sorry hun, but best of luck to any future pieces you write!

Too late 

[DarkParty 73]

Yeah honestly I kind of expected this one to fail lol. I was attempting a high-risk, high reward magic, but I guess it turned out to be a high risk-unrealistically high reward. I am not sure if  Ishould try to alter this or just try to make a different app. (cause I am just interested in app making lol.)

Edited October 23, 2025 by Salmon Fry

[DarkParty 73]

Maybe I should do a Feat cause that would be easier.

[sam33497 7356]

Accepted.

[PolarLoLs 984]

24 minutes ago, Salmon Fry said:

Yeah honestly I kind of expected this one to fail lol. I was attempting a high-risk, high reward magic, but I guess it turned out to be a high risk-unrealistically high reward. I am not sure if  Ishould try to alter this or just try to make a different app. (cause I am just interested in app making lol.)

Dont make MAs or FEATS for the sake of making them, play the server and see what you think would fit its current narrative. Dont fix what isnt broken and dont try to make stuff right up if you're new to lore writing

[PrimnyaQuorum 3999]

49 minutes ago, Salmon Fry said:

Yeah honestly I kind of expected this one to fail lol. I was attempting a high-risk, high reward magic, but I guess it turned out to be a high risk-unrealistically high reward. I am not sure if  Ishould try to alter this or just try to make a different app. (cause I am just interested in app making lol.)

In general glass cannon magics are bad. they are either overpowered or borderline useless

 

equally the abyss is its own thing; calling a horror summoning magic abyssal summoning doesnt really make sense

[DarkParty 73]

Ok. I am not exactly sure I understand. A story team member said this was accepted, but then people continued to talk as if the magic had been denied, so could I get a confirmation on the acceptance of this? And if this is indeed accepted, would I be aloud to seriously nerf it first cause a lot of the negative comments have been about the OPness.

Edited October 23, 2025 by Salmon Fry

[Metamancy 1765]

The story team member that said this was accepted is, unfortunately, making a cruel joke.

[DarkParty 73]

Oh lol. K.

[Rig 17580]

Abyssal refers to 'The Abyss' on LoTC, which is a Necromancy hub on another map. Just another thing to tack onto the list. 

[Islamadon 9158]

This lore has been denied. You will be sent a forum PM regarding the reasons for denial within the next 24 hours.