Gwonam_Blaze

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Your application has been denied and I'm giving you a verbal warning for plagiarism: - Plagiarising any part of your application is against the rules and will result in a 1 week ban per offense in future. Never directly copy from any other source; always use your own words. Reasons for denial: - You plagiarised your roleplaying definition. Even if you admitted to it, it's still against the rules. Please do not do this again. - For "What do you think the server will be like?", we simply want to know what you expect from the server and what sort of experience you think you'll gain from it. - You have not given any definitions for Metagaming and powergaming. Please give a full answer to both of these definitions. You may research their meanings any way you wish, even by using Google, but do not directly copy from anywhere; Use your own words! - Your biography is very short and extremely vague. What happened to his parents? Who is his girlfriend, and what's the story behind them meeting? What about the rest of his life, where's all the story from there? You need to write at least 2 paragraphs of biography for it to be acceptable. Please expand on your character's life and add some events that have had an impact on them to make them in to who they are today. - There is no server lore in your biography. Please include a sufficient amount of server lore, including at least a couple of towns/cities and mention of a few of the other races. Keep in mind, we currently live in the realm of Anthos and your character is just 21, so only lore relevant to there should be applicable. If you need help finding server lore, use our official wiki here: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/ - Your weakness is a little debatable; Unless you already have a friend ready to play your character's girlfriend in-game, we won't ever be seeing the two together which renders your weakness rather pointless. Please change your weakness so that it is more like a genuine flaw that could put them at a disadvantage in particular situations. Your application is nice so far, and I can see you're quite eager to be accepted, but it does need a lot of work. Please spend a fair amount of time fixing each of the points above to maximise your chances of acceptance. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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Denying as an assumed accidental double-post.

Moved to Accepted Forum

Your application has been accepted! Congratulations! I have to say, you really confused me when you posted your edit as an entirely new app. For future reference, when someone asks you to 'edit' an application, they usually mean edit the original post rather than create an entirely new one with the edited version. However, you did fix the things I asked for, so good job! Also, you seem to have double-posted this, but I'll assume it was un-intentional and won't hold it against you. A GM should implement you soon. If you have any further questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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Moved to Denied Forum

Your application has been denied for the following reasons: - Your biography doesn't make much sense and lacks a lot of details. What was this seemingly random illness that killed your character's mother? Even if it hasn't been discovered in-character, it should have an identification. Also, your character just 'quit' school when he was 14 and started learning swordsmanship instead? Didn't his parents have anything to say or do about this? Please add more detail to the events in your biography so that it makes more sense and is more interesting. - You haven't included enough lore in your biography. Please add a bit more server lore, such as a couple of cities and mention of a couple of the other races. Also, the lore you included was not only extremely vague, but inaccurate; We left Asulon over 30 in-game years ago, meaning your character couldn't have been born there if he is 21 today. He would've been born in Anthos or Elysium. If you need help finding server lore, use our official wiki here: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/ - Your ambitions are much too short; literally 5 words. Please expand on your character's ambitions; What does he hope to achieve? What will he do once he reaches his goals? - Your skills and weaknesses don't make much sense. What do you mean by 'good at wolves'? Good at training them? Riding them? How and why is your character 'weak' to light? You can't just use something your character dislikes as a weakness; It has to be something that could put your character at a disadvantage when compared to another. Simply disliking light and preferring darkness wouldn't be enough to make him 'flawed'. - Your skin does not suit the setting of the server (It's too modern). Hoodies and sunshades are not appropriate medieval attire. I would suggest finding a medieval themed skin before trying to apply again. - Your entire application is full of grammar and spelling errors. If English is not your native language then there's no need to try and get it perfect, but please try your best to fix as many errors as possible; the fewer there are, the more it will help you get accepted. It's a nice first attempt, but your application needs a lot of work. Spend a lot of time and care making sure your application doesn't run in to any of the same problems that I've listed. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

You must designate 'PVP' BEFORE any attacks are made but after conflict has been ensured, such as when the first character draws their weapon or emotes beginning to cast a spell. PVP default only means that if neither party can wholly agree on a fighting method or the amount of votes for RP/PVP is equal, then it automatically resorts to PVP. This does not mean that you can resort to PVP at any time you wish or because you are losing, or if one person in a group of 5 wants to PVP but the rest want to RP that it resorts to PVP. I asked around about this the other day and Cappy said pretty much the exact same thing. If you don't believe me, here's a screenshot: Once a strike has been made or a spell has been cast, it's too late; You'd basically be voiding their attack and ignoring emotes, which is against the rules. I've had this happen to me twice now, on both occasions where the spell was from point-blank range and would've undoubtedly been fatal. As soon as I cast the spell, the other player tries to initiate PVP, which is ridiculous; I've officially cast the spell in RP so you should have to deal with it in RP. TL;DR: Yes, but you can't just 1-emote strike someone to ensure RP. Still have to separately emote drawing weapons or preparing a spell.

The following is a simple guide on what we (The Application Team, or 'AT' for short) do and do not want to see in your biograpy after submitting your application. Too often do I see a lack of the 'do's' and an excess of the 'do nots' in applicant bios, so I've decided to try and tackle this by making this guide to (hopefully) help you not make the same mistake. It is quite long, but I urge you to read it as I'm certain it can help you make a perfect bio and avoid a plethora of denials: What we DO want to see in your biography: At LEAST 2 paragraphs of good, strong content - This means at least 2 long, well formatted and progressive chunks of literature that contain as many 'Dos' and as little don't 'Do nots' on this guide as possible. Effort and determination - Put passion in to every sentance, show us that you love to roleplay! Writing up a 10 paragraph essay on everything your character did growing up in Oxford Dictionary detail is nice, but giving us a half as long, heart-wrenching, exciting story that makes us want to keep reading to find out what finally happens to your character and where they leave off is better! If you're denied, put some real effort in to fixing the points the AT leaves. If we see that you've hardly made an effort at all to change anything the next time you post it, we'll put equally as little effort in to wanting to accept you. With great effort comes great recognition! Compelling events - In other words, we want you to give us several events that have had an impact on your character to form them in to who they are today. This can be as simple as the process of learning a skill or a traumatic event. Make sure they aren't cliche (mentioned later, in the 'do nots') and are easy to follow. A fair amount of official server lore - This is a big one, and rightly so! Lore is quite a difficult thing to describe, but it is basically the history, explanation or truth behind something. For instance, the explanation behind alchemy and how it all works is its 'lore'. The history behind Aegis and how it fell to the Undead is its 'lore'. The magic (or more suitably, science) behind how Lord of the Craft's ghosts work and their unusual weakness to gold is their 'lore'. Hopefully, that clears up what lore is. If not, I'd recommend googling its meaning as I'm sure the internet can explain it better than I ever could. In your bio, we'd like to see at least; Mention of 2 or 3 cities, especially the one your character was born in and the capital city of their race's nation, reference to at least 1 of the other races, whether those be making friends with them as a child or enemies with them later, and preferably a major event or two from our official server lore (although this isn't necessary, it'd still be nice to see), such as the great storm of Asulon or the several terrible plagues the lands have suffered. One big mistake people tend to make is using lore from Asulon or Aegis when their character is just 20 or so. We had left Aegis over 100 in-game years ago and left it for Asulon, which we left around 40 in-game years ago for Elysium/Kalos, which in turn we left about 30 in-game years ago for Anthos (which is where we currently reside). If you want to have your character around 30 years old or younger, make sure only to use lore relevent to Anthos. Otherwise, use lore relevent to any other regions they may have previously lived in. For information on Lord of the Craft's lore, visit the official wiki here: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/ What we DO NOT want to see in your biography: Weak story - Weak story is a term that is used to describe something that doesn't make much sense, is far-fetched and has very little explanation behind it. For instance: "Vithquar tripped over a rock and fell on her face, then saw a magical ring underneath a rock and slid it on to her finger. It fit perfectly". This is weak story progression, because, first of all; What is this seemingly random 'magical' ring that has never been seen or mentioned before? Creating random items that are allegedly magical or powerful is a big no-no, since it generally conflicts with server lore and just seems like you're trying to find a cheap way to give your character a special ability. Secondly; My character just happens to trip over at the exact right moment to fall on the ground and find a powerful ring that nobody before her had ever found who were probably actually looking for it. Oh, and the ring just happens to be her exact finger size on top of all that? That's absolutely absurd and far-fetched; The chances of that ever happening are beyond extortionate. It's okay to create interesting or unusual events in your bio, but keep them strong; Don't give a ridiculous, almost impossible explanation as to how your character achieves or experiences something. Follow the lore correctly. When you're creating events in your story, read them out to yourself. Do they sound reasonable and realistic? Is it feasible for your character to accomplish or experience something like this in such a way? It's always best to read your bio to yourself or show it to a friend and see if they think anything seems 'weak' before posting it. Lack of formatting and 'walls of text' - Formatting is more important than most people realise; It shows you have the initiative to take the time to ensure your application is easy for the AT to read and doesn't make them struggle to review your application. A common mistake made is creating a 'wall of text', which is basically putting no spaces between the paragprahs of your biography to form one great big chunk. This makes it exceptionally difficult to keep track of how far we've read and is very unappealing to the eyes. On the flipside, there are also times where I see applicants putting too many spaces in their biographies, after literally every line in fact. This is just as bad, if not, worse because it makes it 'extremely' difficult to work out where the last line you read was. Please read your biography to yourself before posting to see whether it is easy to read and won't cause the AT too much pain. Cliches - A cliche is an event/occurance that is extremely predictable or seen so often in an application/other media that the increativity becomes cringe worthy. Some of the worst offenders include: -"X killed my Y when I was a child". Usually Orcs or bandits killing parents. Having your parents, grandparents, carers or guardians killed by a raiding party, no matter how old, is almost a guaranteed denial because it is 'that' cliche and overdone. Also, why would these obviously merciless, horrible people just leave you alive after just killing your parents without a second thought? If they did it just to be spiteful and nasty, maybe that would make a little more sense, but still probably not enough to be considered 'acceptable'. In fact, you should probably avoid your parents dying together in any catastrophic events. If you want to kill off your parents in your story, I'd recommend doing so with just one or putting a large time-gap between their deaths to make it a little more interesting. - "X taught me Y when I was Z years old". Usually something along the lines of 'My father taught me how to use swords when I was 10'. Again, this is one of the worst offenders and, to be honest, I think I dislike it more than the previous. It's incredibly lazy and wastes so much potential that you could use to give an interesting story behind how your character acquired their skills. It's also very ill-explained. What does it mean by someone 'taught' you this skill? I always get the silly idea that the story behind this explanation went something like this: "Son, it is time to learn the ways of the sword! ... There, we're done, now wait about five years and you'll inexplicably become a master without any explanation or evidence of progression whatsoever!". Unfortunately, most skills are not acquired as easily as this. I'm sure you can see how silly this cliche is, now that I've laid it out. When you're explaining how you acquired skills, spend time and effort doing it! - "I was attacked by X and barely survived". Usually attacked by bandits on the road to somewhere. This cliche isn't so bad, as long as it's just a simple robbery and your character isn't attacked too badly, but a lot of applicants like to try and turn bandit encounters in to a horrible experience where their character is beaten and brutalised, then barely survive on the brink of death. It's seen all too often and doesn't entirely make sense. If the beatings were 'that' bad, your character would most definitely die, and if they didn't, how would they be so lucky that someone came along the same road just in time to save them and yet nobody came along throughout the entire time they were being beaten? If you want to have a bandit encounter in your story, try to make it realistic; Bandits are almost strictly horrible, nasty people that don't give a single damn about you. Saying that at any point they 'felt sorry' for your character and let them live is ridiculous. Powergaming/Metagaming - If you're writing your biography, you should already know what these mean and if you don't, I suggest you go look them up right now. Essentially, what we don't want to see in your biography is your character taking on about 10 fully armored, equally/more skilled men and killing all, 5, 3 or even 2 of them. Let's put this in to perspective; If you were confronted by 10 men who were fully armed to the teeth, and you had the same amount or less equipment as them, do you really think you would survive long enough to assuredly kill even one of them? I certainly don't, not unless you're Chuck Norris fused with Super Man with the martial arts skill of Bruce Lee. Let me put this lightly; If you're going to include a fight involving your character and 3 or more equally/better equipped and/or trained men, make sure your character gets their ASS KICKED. We don't care how much super amazing training your character has had; We don't want to see players thinking they can walk around and take on 3 or more people and hardly take a scratch. That's powergaming and is going to cause 'a lot' of issues if you do it. On to metagaming, this is one that isn't seen very often in biographies, to be quite honest. Basically, just steer clear of characters somehow knowing and identifying one another in your story without having mentioned them prior. Even if your character has known their friend Billybob since birth and plays Hot-Potato with him every day, we don't know that you're not metagaming unless you tell us first! Filling - Filling is basically using as many words and sentences as possible to describe and explain as many things as possible without giving any interesting or useful information. For instance: "Vithquar lived in a small, nice, sturdy wooden cottage. It was a very nice cottage that was located in Malinor. Vithquar loved her little cottage very much and spent every day in there. Her parents also lived in this cottage, but when they died, she took it over, so now it belongs to Vithquar". Notice how I spent about 4 sentences of useless, boring information to explain that my character lives in a little cottage? This is 'filling', and it basically says to me that you can't be bothered to come up with a well written, interesting story for your character and would rather make an effortless, and boring one instead. A better version of that short story would be: "When Vithquars parents died, they left their wooden cottage, in Malinor, in her possession, and she loved it very much". What I previously spent 4 sentences of garbled mish-mash to explain I just compressed in to a short, sweet sentence that lets us know about her home (that she loves very much) and allows us to move on to the next interesting part of our bio. Nonsensical story - A story that is difficult to follow and doesn't make any sense. A problem I often see a lot is biographies that find it hard to stay on one topic. They talk about what the character did with his friends when he was 5, then suddenly move on to his father taking him to the Elves when he was 10, then becoming a guard at 17, then his parents dying when he was 20, all in one or two sentences. Slow down! This is going way too fast; It's hard to keep up with the character's story and isn't giving a good explanation behind all of the events taking place in their life. Take time explaining all of the events that have happened to your character and turn them in to interesting segments of their life. The more of a pleasure your biography is for us to read, to more likely we will be to accept it! Perspective hopping - Constantly switching between 1st and 3rd person. This is one a lot of applicants overlook and it certainly won't help you get accepted. Here's an example of switching between 1st and 3rd person: "My name is Vithquar. Vithquar is a very strong and caring woman, that loves to talk to others. When I was younger, I liked to run for many miles and play with other children. Vithquar also liked to go to local bakeries and sample the sweet, fresh bread that they had to offer". See how I constantly referred to myself to Vithquar in one sentence, then referred to her as an entirely different person in the next? Stick to one tense when writing your bio, in fact, you should probably strictly write in third person, since it tends to make more sense and more-or-less puts you in to the perspective of roleplaying. Well, that's that; Those are the 'dos' and 'don'ts' of biographies! Now, hopefully you have all the knowledge and tools you need to make a good biography, so go ahead make the best biography you can!

All natural, baby... Sorta. Blue > Green You're both so chill that I don't think I can say anything else about you, to be quite honest.

Won't lie; I Lol'd. Have my +1

Needs about 20% of 'Parading Bull making a big deal out of something else going on the forums that doesn't interest him' ( All meant in good taste, no jimmy rustling intended! )

-Shrug- I don't talk to you much, but you always seemed like a pretty chill guy! After a rather unsuccessful attempt of sieging a town, a few other Scourge and I decided to take to the streets and do some 'antagonist' roleplay. We soon stumbled across a group of suspiciously well prepared Dwarves, that all seemed to appear within moments after we confronted a single, lone Dwarf who hadn't performed any visible attempts of calling for allies whatsoever, and combat ensued. After my character successfully jet-flamed someone in the face with corruptive fire and yet they still managed to stand and fight like a healthy warrior, she soon fell victim to a fatal strike to her neck and her spine, but not before she summoned forth a rift containing five grotesque horrors. Chase did not produce either of Vithquar's wounds, however, what he did do is finish off the last remaining two horrors after another three had been burned to ashes by a fire evoker. After the fighting had ceased, a single, what one can only assume, necromancer came along and dragged Vithquar's body away to a secluded area before resurrecting it under his complete influence. It was not clear what his exact intentions were, but all he seemed interested in knowing was how Vithquar had died. Due to the fact that she hadn't actually seen what killed her, because the strike was almost spontaneously fatal and from behind her, she could not answer this and the necromancer instead had to resort to checking her body for a means of death. After this, he simply cast her body aside, dead once more. The End.

You seem like quite a nice and friendly person, really! You just tend to catch me at times when I'm super busy, like everyone does, so don't sweat it! No, Anawkin, mayonnaise is not a question... Horse Radish is not a question either. To be very honest, I don't think it would be fair to give an opinion on you, seeing as I honestly don't know you very well (I think I've spoken to you just once :S ). One thing I will say though; You seem to care an awful lot about what people think about you, probably too much to be healthy. LoltoobadI'manswering. Whenever I give the honest answer (which is F, like it or lump it), I get a lot of 'OMFG THAT'S SO EDGY TOO BIG NONO'. Of course, an over-sized bosom doesn't suit an intentionally provocative character, does it? So instead, I tend to just say D, since that gets less complaints. And no, mayonnaise is not a question, for the last time!! 1. Yes. 2. Yes. 3. Yes. 4. Yes. 5. Mayonnaise.

(( Despite the original purpose of this, I'm somehow touched and glad I read this ))

Yes, I did make another one of these a while ago, but I felt this achievement of sorts deserved another. So there you go, ask me anything; 'What is love?', 'How big is the moon?', 'Do I ever wear underwear on my head?', I don't care; just ask me anything and I'll do my best to answer!

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Your application has been denied and requires the following changes: - Your biography is still much too short and doesn't give a very interesting explanation of your character's life. Please expand on your bio and turn it in to compelling history that develops your character, giving them a real personality and story to discover. Also, please don't use 'X taught him how to do Y' explanations for skills and such; It seems extremely lazy and it doesn't reflect well on how much effort you're willing to put in to roleplaying. Give a more thorough explanation on how your character acquired his skills and turn them in to interesting events. - There is absolutely no server lore in your biography. Please include plenty of server lore (At least a few cities or towns, especially the one where your character was born, and mention of a few of the other races in Anthos). The more you add, the better! If you need help finding server lore, use our official wiki here: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/ - Your first weakness doesn't make any sense at all (It doesn't actually explain why this is a weakness, in fact, I'm not even sure what it's supposed to be saying). Expand on this and tell us why this puts him at a disadvantage when compared to other characters. Your application is getting there! It just needs a bit of fixing here and there. Just be sure to spend a lot of time and effort adjusting the points I've given, especially the bio as that lacks the most detail, and you'll do much better. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

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Your application has been denied for the following reasons: - Once again, the events in your biography don't make much sense, and this time, it is absolutely full of flaws. This random group of bandits just mercilessly attacks a mother and father, killing them both while they clearly have a child with them, and yet is 'pitiful' toward the child whose parents they literally just killed? That's a fairly ludicrous way to start your bio, with all due respect. Also, how did the bandits know his father's name? Did they know him that well before just killing him? - Again... Your only explanation for your character's skills is 'X person taught him Y' (except for the part where the Orc lady taught him about history, which was good except for the fact that she is both a bandit and an Orc; 2 things that don't usually delve far in to education and prefer to occupy themselves with bloodshed), which really isn't acceptable as it lacks any real thought and seems completely lazy. Try to make the events following your character learning his skills more interesting instead of giving a 1-liner explanation for them all. - There's a bit of powergaming in your biography; Your character is pitted up against 5 armed mercinaries/bounty hunters, who just killed his entire 'bandit family' with seemingly minimal effort, yet he managed to single-handedly kill two of them and only take a single scratch before getting knocked down? Even if he did end up losing, it's quite absurd that he managed to kill two of these clearly superior men and barely get a scratch before finally being subdued. In a fight against 5 at least equally trained or armed men, I'd be stunned if a person like your character could end up killing even one of them before he's torn to shreds. In future, if there's any fights on your bio, make sure there's no powergaming (Keep it reasonable and realistic). - Your character's personality is, to say the least, extremely conflicting. While it's not impossible, I will say it's 'extremely' unusual and unlikely for someone who was raised as young as they can remember to be a bandit (someone who mercilessly kills, tortures and harasses other people for a living) to have an interest and love for history and geography. This is the sort of behavior I'd expect from a well educated High Elf who has lived a sheltered life in the Silver City, not a bandit who was raised to kill and terrorise other people from practically toddler age and has never seemed to have a problem with it. Please make your character's personality suit the sort of life they've had rather than going completely against the sort of nature that would naturally come to them considering their upbringing. To be quite honest, I would suggest completely getting rid of any mention of being related to/raised by bandits, since this is a pretty cliche and rather ridiculous. As a matter of fact, I'd suggest completely avoiding the whole 'Abandoned/lost at birth' idea, as it seldom turns out to be an interesting and not ridiculous story unless you keep it extremely normal. Instead of going for a strange and extremely strange story for your bio, try to keep it simple and relaxed, with a few interesting events that help develop your character within. Just making an outright absurd story, like being raised by the bandits who killed your parents from the age of 1 week and then turning out to be more interested in history and geography, only makes us shake our heads. However, the rest of your application is good; Your biography is just in desperate need of improvement. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me.

How awesome are you?

Your application has been denied because you did not make the following changes in the 24 hour period: - Your biography, like last time, needs to be a bit more in-depth on certain subjects such as your character's father teaching him how to hunt. Rather than simply explaining it by saying something along the lines of 'His father taught him how', turn it in to more of a story. How did his father teach him? What was the process they went through to learn this skill? You don't need to write a whole essay, but make it more interesting than a simple, 1-line explanation. You should do the same for the guardsman training. I am going to review your latest application as if it were the edited version of this application, however in future, please edit your last application rather than posting a new one.