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[Playable CA creature] Merfolk [**WIP**]

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Merfolk (Currently Undergoing a rewrite.)

 

Origin & Culture

Origin

The merfolk originated when once upon a time an daemon was bored and decided to perform itself a little experiment.31960.thumb.jpg.41a6634d7eafeb5d239db1d59b441101.jpg So it took an elvish community of people and sank their entire home which was found on an island to then soon after give the people of this now sunken fish like tails, gills, webbed fingers and scales. 

Culture

Their culture is one quite similar to most others, it’s controlled by a central hub known as ‘kingdom’ though it’s ruled by a queen. Merfolk are known to have a low fertility rate, this is due to the 7-10 year gap between a pregnancy and the possibility for another child. Because of this fertility merfolk from all around often gather to celebrate once a mermaid has gotten pregnant. Children are very valued in merfolk culture, but once they hit the age of 14 they are most often left by their parents to learn to fend for themselves.

The food merfolk eat consists of aquatic plants and raw fish. Their agility and speed in the water allows them to catch these beings for consumption. Though technically possible a merfolk can eat the processed food of surface dwellers, though the processing of the food will upset their stomach.

Merfolks find themselves living in old sunken cities or settlements constructed in coral reefs. Here they live like most other beings with guard forces, artists, medical staffs, merchants. These cities are controlled by a queen holding absolute power and authority. 

 

Physical Description

Merfolk are species carrying the body of a humanoid but the tail of a fish instead of legs.in appearance their tails vary from merfolk to merfolk. Some may carry a tail akin to a goldfish whilst others may carry one akin to that of a shark. The merfolk body bears patches of scales, usually small flesh coloured scales on the cheeks or torso. The fingers on a merfolk hand are connected by a stretchable fish like webbing. Along with their hands their ears too carry this webbing, having multiple thick points that stick out and are connected by web, these ears are not much bigger than the ones found on a human. 

A merfolk has sharp teeth which they use for eating fish beneath the ocean wave. These teeth have also been known to tear the flesh of humans occasionally. 

ey use to breathe underwater, though it is technically possible for them to breathe on land too, as long as their gills keep shut as their lungs won’t be able to expand if the air slips out atJust below the breast merfolks have a set of gills which th their gills. 





 

Mental Description

The merfolk are by nature a curious species and have been known to poke their heads out of the water to look at boat-travelers. They are also a teasing species often in the mood for poking fun at people.

Around the age of 250 merfolk will go feral. Feral merfolk seek out surface dwellers to drag them beneath the surface for them to then eat the surface dweller.



 

Abilities

Merolk can breathe underwater and swim faster than normal humanoids. If their gills are covered and kept shut they’re able to survive on land without ‘drowning’

 

Restrictions

Merfolk are unable to walk on land.

Merfolk can live up to the age of 300 but go feral around the age of 250.

Merfolk are an infertile bunch and require both parties of a FTB to roll a 15+/20

Merfolk can only reproduce with other merfolk.

Merfolk have to keep their gills shut when they are on land.

 

Purpose OOC

merfolk are a species made to provide RP and unique gameplay to the oceans and streams of LotC , on top of that they provide players a reason to use the ocean for more than just a way to hastily travel using a boat. Even more so the creature gives people a unique set of restrictions by denying them use of the land.

 

Edited by Missa_Demaris

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There are a lot of flaws in this lore, and a few big ones that will stop this from ever becoming more than a fever dream.

Firstly, the lore itself isn’t very well written. It’s backstory is poorly written and offers no description beyond god x does thing to group y and they become mermaids. Its poorly written and doesn’t provide an actually interesting story. This exact problem is seen in every piece of this lore.

Secondly, the lore is written to not include many abilities. Even that which is included is poorly worded and written very short. Almost half of their culture written in this post is just dedicated to how reproduction works.

 

Overall, this lore needs a large list of things fixed before it will even be considered by the LT.

-Back story needs heavily fleshed out, make it interesting and a good story

-Culture needs to have a story to it, as to why they developed this way and then build off that and describe what they do

-Mental and Physical descriptions should be heavily fleshed out if not tying into how they came to exist

-Abilities need to be better expanded on, perhaps add some more to grow interest.

-Work on the formatting, make it look better appealing, and add more pictures.

-Redlines don’t need to be bolded, underlined, and in neon red.

-Citations don’t say anything like who made said things, and they link to vague and uninformative pieces.

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lots is due an aquatic creature with all the mechanics at our disposal, this ain’t it.

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Edited: Just found this, not sure if you saw it or not 

Edit 2: Oh **** and also this 

 

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On 4/1/2020 at 4:37 PM, Stalistena said:

Edited: Just found this, not sure if you saw it or not 

Edit 2: Oh **** and also this 

 

Don't forget the Kala Ihmiset C/A that was denied only because we had ET creatures called Axolotyns

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I would personally love to see Merfolk, but my main thing with this: If they can’t go on land, where will they live? That along with I think the lore is poorly written. I NEED an aquatic humanoid race, but, this isn’t it.

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