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Xan is an entity to be used scarcely if that. The only viable interactions he will have relates to the upkeep of the Keepers, therefore he shouldn't have any participating role in what I play- regardless, the Prophet is in a catatonic state for a reason. Either one will perish soon enough, perhaps both.

The character is canon although there's little to no lore in relation to her. This is me, making her 'fallen' status appropriate.

I won't fault you there, I've issues re-reading my work. Regardless, thanks for the advice. Though I have to say, this character is already canon. This is a clarification to her backstory. (To be fair, I'd sent it through like thirteen people prior to submitting it. Swgrclan being one of those.)

Organization? It's a lore piece detailing her history, that's literally it. I won't provide a summary, you should read it. Edit: You can find clarification on the link I've submitted on the thread now.

She is the legitimate child to a descendant Aengul, the founder of the magic. Thereby extent she contains far more prowess than the Ascended. The Ascended are merely deific folk who have had their extremely, very extremely diluted Aengulic blood activated. When an Aengul/Daemon descends and has a child, it is half-mortal half-God, hence the 'Demi-Aengul' concept. (Every descendant has the equivalent to, per say, 1% Aengul blood coursing through their veins. Extremely diluted, too extreme for anything prevalent to transpire.) A lot can happen in relation to the server- talks are even in the process now. Though, don't get me wrong, she isn't intended as a full-on protagonist or antagonist.

It's equivalent to Mordring or Azdromoth, per say. Their prowess and I suppose you could say overall purpose is vague albeit confined to the general concept of their predecessors. Ykella'Fiat Lux, her appropriate name being: 'Ykella' with 'Fiat Lux' being the Latin addition: "Let there be light" which, in my opinion, befits the initial character prior to her fall. Latin = LoTC's equivalent to Gods tongue. She will also be played by myself.

what part of this is from dark souls son 99% of it is my own creativity that 1% is just the pictures...

SOL INVICTA, THE FALLEN TITAN “When I was born, he bathed me in fire and ushered a solemn phrase that weaved into the fibres of my immortal essence; but that essence has since then been tinged in ebon hellfire, and his fires have faded- I have been reborn and baptised by Order.” Sol Invicta, a once illustrious Demi-Aengul who had accomplished many-a-feat including the near extinction of the dragonkin. The authority that brought ruin, death, and decay to the unorthodox species both present and future, for her word of power ushered throughout the annals of the Athna lineage. Although, this, and more prominently renowned as being the firstborn child of Xan, Aengul of Order and Guardianship alike she adopted the raw trait of ‘ORDER’ and ever since instated the doctrine of Order without mercy. Thereby extension, she was proclaimed both a grandiose leader albeit ripe with tyranny. Disobedience was never a factor in the Order she maintained and the death of their foes was an unrelenting statement. However, when her reign was at its peak her brotherhood was ambushed via a fleet of draconic creatures, emblazing her mother’s homeland and in retaliation Sol Invicta summoned the Guardian’s Grimoire and with its seemingly boundless power transported the remnant forces of the first draft of the Order of the Golden Lance into the Fringe, the unrelenting force of Xan’s azure power incarnate tore her asunder, and their tyrannical Lady was presumed dead at the behest of her fair Father. Wrong, they were, and she found herself between the decrepit walls of her kiln. Nought but cinder and ash beneath a forest of flaring fire. Although her immortal essence was bound to the kiln and with its existence, ensured hers, she could not perish via any mere feat. Eventually, she found herself reforming although many-a-year late. When Iblees and Aerial alike ravaged the lands of Aegis, heralding damnation, her catalyst provided ample protection in her dire time of need- albeit it wasn't up until the amassed power brought havoc and tore the earth asunder, producing the gaping abyss we know today was when she fell. And as she fell, so did her immortal essence, her fires faded. Except, death is a fallacy when faced with an Immortal. And by extension, her fires reformed. Her kiln bound betwixt the tenebrous panels of the ever consuming Abyss, now tinged in an ebon mass to signify her fallen status; she was left to her own devices, abandoned by her Father. And it was then that she discovered the Legion to which she cradled betwixt her everloving limbs, bringing life into their decrepit husks and brought them into a newfound era to which they would stand as her vanguard. An army to her heart. With the Legion she had developed, she pursued the concept of Order within the tenebrous realm of the Abyss, conquering a large sect of land to accompany her growing empire, consisting of her spectral-esque forces and the unorthodox alike; her prowess and capability drew in a myriad of folk to which her very own Order began its evolution. From one sect, to two, the Fallen Titan adopted the myriad of lost souls roaming the depths of the Abyss, heralding their souls past this life, to the new, where they may rejoice in the loving embrace of their forefathers and Maker alike; those that remained, equipped an onyx cloak to conceal their undying features- her numbers increased substantially into a horrific, abhorrent force. Though it wasn't until the Titan sought the Temple of Yore, situated betwixt the annals of the tenebrous Abyss- proclaiming the temple as hers, it would mean a grandiose goal to the completion of her goal. The subjugation of the Abyss to preserve her acute sense of Order- was, when the great, skeletal beast took notice of her advancing forces. He took flight, accompanying him his Dragonflight. Both sides clashed in a myriad of skirmishes and sieges alike, demolishing one another with the full intent of Mordring protecting the historical contents of the Abyss- The Temple of the Black Sun, against Sol Invicta’s intent of demolishing it and instating one anew, kindling for her flame. However, come the climax of their inevitable battle Mordring had deceived a sect of Sol Invicta’s gathering- and she would later come to realise the negativity of her waywardness. The ebon depths, unorthodoxly ignited via ebon hellfire spewed from the likes of Mordring and Ykella alike in their mock battle of weening down one another’s foes produced a grandiose battlefield, broken and torn, the earth split asunder with a seemingly eternal spout of azure liquid cascading from the heavens above. Mordring set foot upon the sacred land of what once was Aegis, footsteps ripe with a melancholic crunch as his joints clanked with his advancement upon the invading force- staff raised, the pseudo-Aengul was beckoned by the lamented Lich, whose hand was forced by the Fallen Titan, so she were duly dubbed. With solemn tranquility bequeathing the decrepit homeland, a bell tolled, the key signification to Sol Invicta’s arrival as she emerged from between the onyx passage to reveal a set of wings, wrapped in an azure hue, clad in a gilded suit with chain cast from an ebon mass to signify her fallen status- albeit were the grandiose great hammer clasped betwixt her digits with the reminiscent bell atop its spine, monstrous in size- the equivalent to a grand mace. With a split of her jaws, the elder lady spoke with a tone exhuming with raw authority albeit soothing to the ears of those she commandeered as her forces. A lullaby, to settle the dumbed minds of those she cradled dear. They took to one knee as she settled atop the earth, great hammer raised toward the unorthodox Mordring who stood stalwart before the final frontier that would be his demise- his life, his home, and that what he swore to protect were at risk- although Mordring the Gallant wasn’t without his deceit. She did, indeed, speak aloud to those present: “Ashen Ones, thou needn’t cower behind the unorthodox Mordring, a soul once noble- once illustrious, now decrepit and warped from its former image. Kindling for the Eternal Fire, I will take it all, and thine souls shalt be baptised by mine fire of yore; rise, my children, and let us claim fuel for the fire.” Albeit weren’t up until she’d noticed her army wouldn’t raise, forced into a catatonic state at the behest of Mordring with an object clutched betwixt his ivory digits- poised high, they were damned to deaf and silence, unable to recognise the simple notion of adhering their commander. It provided ample time for a rogue faction situated within the ranks of Sol Invicta to take their opportunity, and that they did. For the Titan found her frame hunched backwards, emphasising a curve whilst the jawbone of a deceased dragon, slaughtered by her hands and no other had found itself lodged into the spine of Ykella, and out through her frame- effectively impaled through and through. Unable to perish by the simple notion nor live right, an ethereal ritual had begun to take place whilst the artefact clutched by Mordring shattered- enabling Ykella’s forces to arise, but they remained poised, sundered by the illiterate cries of their Lady. Mordring’s forces took their chance, and promptly massacred through the denizen of her men and women alike whilst they remained stoic, worshipping their forlorn lady; ushering their prayers to their respective undead lord. Tortured souls brought to their inevitable demise, only to be reinstated back into their everlasting selves; rot, gore, and undeath. Mordring took his advance, producing a scathed blade which he wielded to cleave her wings in two- severing them from her frame, and the Lich promptly buried the blade betwixt her shoulder-blades in two, separate circles- prying outward, he began the notion of a meagre blood eagle, allowing the mixture of scarlet and fluorescent blood to flow free from her newfound wounds. With newly drawn wings split wide, revealing the panels of her mangled spine, muscle, and vein alike- the abhorrent Lich splattered a rune of Gods bloods beneath her feet, binding the Demi-Aengul to the jawbone of the dragon until she perished. His last, final decree, after her forces had dwindled considerably was to retract- Ykella, crucified atop a hill overlooking the sanctuary would be punished with glowering onward toward that what she sought to conquest. Both Mordring and Sol Invicta alike, bound to their respective positions- the custodian of the Abyss standing stalwart for fourteen days and thirteen nights whilst a murder of crows feasted upon her corpse, devouring the pallid flesh of Ykella- her screams of pure agony sundered the Abyss, bellowing across the entirety of its contents whilst strip-by-strip was cleaved free in minuscule sects, revealing an array of mangled flesh and bone beneath. Eventually, she passed from her forced catatonic state, and back to her hearth where she would, she pressed into a state of reformation for how many ever years to come. Her once undying corpse now a riddled mess of rot and gore alike- lacking three limbs, hanging idle by a few strands of unrelenting flesh, atop the jawbone, it remained albeit lost to the primordial passage of time. Although, now, time had passed. The remnant force of her legion, linked to the eternal fire had gathered and constructed two, ivory towers beside the first- the final frontier to their undying Lady’s heart, and there they took to one knee with their blade’s poised against the earth in their gesture of praise, ushering a silent worship. Decades would pass, then two centuries before she was permitted the right to reform; amidst fire and ash sprouted the limbs of Sol Invicta- a scorched woman, clad in ethereal steel, although. Something had changed. The seeds of discord had been sown, a fire quenched elsewhere, and weaved into the fibres of Sol Invicta- albeit didn’t thwart her desire for subjugation and order, it empowered her need and so... She shifted her head upright to gaze toward the Black Sun, blade drawn from the fierce fires. "I shalt right what hath been wronged." Redlines & Clarification Sol Invicta scan be killed although she cannot be permanently killed unless her kiln was both ruptured and destroyed, thereby forcing her immortal essence to locate a new catalyst able to withhold its grandiose power; it is the equivalent to a pseudo-permanent kill- she cannot be re-animated via normalistic means and by extension, may take an hour, day, month, year, or years to reform. Sol Invicta is the child of Xan although she adopted the raw trait of ‘Order’ which was weaved into her very fibres and is, by extension, the only concept Sol Invicta cares for in the mortal realm which she would aspire to obtain via any feat necessary. With Sol Invicta's soul bound to the hearth of her now splintered kiln is viable for either corruption or cleansing at the behest of whomever; she may be moulded into an antagonistic force or a protagonistic force-- although she won’t have any excessive means against the server as a whole, this inducts flavour into the concept of being able to ‘corrupt’ or ‘cleanse’ an already Fallen Demi-Aengul instead of the usual kill. By no means is Sol Invicta a means to bolster the Paladins ranks, she may be seen as their antagonistic or protagonistic force which is to be dictated through RP, although her doctrine implies conflict betwixt the two forces. Sol Invicta possesses both martial prowess and magical; albeit solely confined to Paladinism it is an exemplified feat of ‘event magic’ which enables her to perform a variety of deeds- of which can be explained through her half-immortalism. Ykella’s magical prowess is expansive and by extension, far more capable to manipulate the magic in its most rawest form; both old and new. Events and interaction will span across multiple communities. This thread explains her initial backstory.

To clarify, the merge is not officially accepted. Cognitism will be undergoing a re-write under the helm of Tahmas and Hugo to produce a more purposeful and interactive magic; should it be approved it will then officially go through a two month trial. Depending on whether the newfound magic passes under the necessary requirements will determine whether the 'merge' is or is not canon. The mental magic re-write is, however, accepted.

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I agree with the notion of this change.

I will be conversing with Mogroka for the production of a chat between Smawton, him, and myself to go through any details correlating to Horen and wiping any concerns in regards to this here lore. ThePyrodude (predominant human LM) will also be contacted to provide advice in regards to the Horen-Krug war to, once more, iron out any concerns/qualms and conclude business.

I pseudo-agree with this.

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And I don't appreciate the fact that you called my lore submission a mess. So don't argue semantics with me. It is fact that you hadn't been involved for a long, long time prior and after; I believe Numirya can attest to that despite the fact that you proclaim her to be the only player to of played their Paladin consistently (somehow forgetting the fact that she dropped Ryder for quite sometime to play in the Sanctuary, right?) It isn't besides the point; don't make a claim and then try to avoid the clash you've inevitably produced. For one, I have been with the Paladins since the very beginning. I lead them right throughout the entirety of the Fringe - bearing in mind, I was literally their leading force; Herun Athna who lead the Order of the Golden Lance - whilst producing a second Order betwixt the Clerics and the Paladins - which never worked due to personal conflict between two characters; Daniel/Herun with things utterly irrelevant to the concept of Order/Purity. - In addition to this I produced the Brotherhood of the Golden Lion and stuck with them right throughout, inducted members, initiated folk, created an entire base for the Paladins to reside in. And you know what happened when I left the server first time round? I was asked to return due to the current leads inability to actually lead; and I returned. I actually put aside a few things in real life to return to the fantasy Order I produced on this server. I continued to RP with them and aid in the progression of the Order right up until I opted to take a break from playing my Paladin - bearing in mind I actively voiced in the chat that if they needed me, just request my presence and I would hop on. - So yeah, I believe I deserved a hiatus - for the better part of a year? That isn't true whatsoever. - I really did indeed deserve a hiatus from the Order as a whole and I don't deserve you comparing my hiatus to you literally going inactive; I put in a lot of effort into this Order. So let's recount that; lead the Order of the Golden Lance through a series of events, argued for the revival of Xan, produced their culture, bases, Orders, developed said Orders, implemented a variety of things, revived it from inactivity twice, and so, so much more. I've practically been leading the Paladins for the better part of two years. Really, don't claim I'm trying to invalidate your opinion whatsoever. Besides, you can't claim "forced re-writes" when there hasn't been a forced re-write whatsoever and it's actually insulting. Your 'hope' to dissuade the Paladins from supporting this lore piece has ultimately failed because I've gone through this with the Paladin chat multiple times, requested criticism, produced an entire chat to request criticism from both the Ascended and Clerical leads; the latter having agreed with the ideal of the newfound Paladin magic. I believe Farryn can attest to this. This magic, by all means whatsoever does not augment their magic whatsoever and in fact, it requires a Paladin to use their initiative. You can't honestly believe that being capable of producing weaponry out of thin air is much more augmented then having to bring their own weaponry and being capable of enchanting it, can you? It's quite literally a minor version of Holy Alteration which you've absolutely had no issue with beforehand. You're quite literally basing your opinion of this re-write on the pre-tense that it isn't compatible with the Holy Order you want, which isn't appreciated, either. Your time with Garion and the Order has long since passed and you have no literal ties to this lore other than what you produced years ago which is absolutely nothing in comparison to what I have produced - thirty pages compared to your nine; which if I'm correct wasn't solely written by you. I've had Arzota and a couple others claim they've produced their own bits in the lore. - Nevertheless, you have no affiliation with the magic, let alone the Order, or Xan for that matter. You abandoned the project and I picked it up and effectively concluded it in an efficient manner. I did more for both the Paladins and Xan than you ever did, sure, perhaps without you he wouldn't of been created albeit was I who did a myriad more than you and made him who, and what he is today. (I'll be linking both documents shortly so the public community may compare whichever is more OP than the other.) In fact, this re-write is completely and utterly compatible with the principle of a deific Order, and again, this is entirely based on your emotional feelings and opinion on something you haven't been affiliated for the better part of a year plus, you weren't even interested in the Order come the end. I'm more than certain Numirya can attest to this. I created the foundations of this magic. Not you. I picked up what you abandoned and I made it great. I produced a legitimate megadocument for Xan and I actively aspire for clarifications/expansions on the culture/backstory. Just because you don't like it doesn't mean you need to go out of your way to dissuade other players from playing it. - In fact, I've had players come up to me and express their interest in playing a Paladin with this re-write. - I'll also note that Numirya (the player you're so keen on using as an example of an active Paladin) has personally thanked me and express her likeness of the lore. Both she and Td were present for the re-write. I'm sure the duo can attest to that, too. If you actually read the lore you'd notice that I merely produced a line expressing that the magic is effective against dragonkin. Not once have I denounced their capability of combatting blemished foes if you actually read the lore and took the entirety of it into consideration instead of focusing on small parts. To be honest, I'd be more caring if a player who interacts with the Paladins or is apart of the Paladins had an issue with it, however, I've yet to receive a complaint, let alone anything negative on it other than clarifying what needs to be clarified. (It was never sword/voidal/clerical) It was Wyrmstalkers, Vindicators, and Clerics. The first being what I would like to re-implement, the middle is already implemented and the last was what I opted to leave out, however, I brought in the notion of 'healing.' By the way, this is me clarifying our capability of healing formally. I have always expressed that the Paladins are unable to heal effectively alike the Clerics, however, they're still capable of healing nevertheless. If the Paladins have an issue with their inability to formally heal as they were able to then they're capable of approaching me and expressing their concern. Thus far, nobody has. Truth is, you abandoned Xan and I picked it up beneath Kai's guidance and did as he asked (Both Garrett and Kai can attest to this) whilst also implementing my own culture around it; your ideal is for the Paladins to eventually combat other deific Orders to severe the deific bond betwixt the mortal realm and AenguDaemonic which I have no intention of adhering to as of now. Our magic does not solely focus around combatting dragonkin. It is an RP culture that my character is trying to implement on something completely unrelated to this and it doesn't deserve your disrespect as it is, in the simplistic sense, roleplay. I re-iterate the fact that you're attempting to produce an argument based on semantics and the fact that you disagree because of your emotional attachments to the old Order which is evident via our brief conversation on Skype and your reply here. Both Numirya and Toxzero are two old Paladins, the former who has consistently played, and the latter who participated from the beginning are two veterans who have expressed their likeness for the lore. I ask you again to provide me with examples or the next reply I won't be responding to. You've insulted both me and my lore twice; called my lore a mess and proclaimed my inactivity for the better part of last year - which is extremely in factual. - I'll ignore the fact that you're also proclaiming I've forced re-writes. At the very least, I did have the respect to contact you prior to submitting Xan lore, and did request any and all information on Xan's idealisms (unless you forgot about that.) This re-write is completely and utterly compatible and your own idealism should not be enforced over this thread. I request that you reply to any further complaints through private messages, at least there I'm capable of providing factual evidence. For now, I'll provide the two documents linking to the 29 page document I produced - with some of Garrett's lore/Kalehart's) compared to your nine page document - refined version. - https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Ql1Ub6Ucji4mhwRW7-wc47RMvkgoY_Kua7U6E4wRko4/edit?usp=sharing Your written document of the first Xan lore. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1m03JLubtgAKq90tcaJ2F_x9uc2zhbIxkXNTbwJTqD14/edit?usp=sharing My written document of the current existing Xan lore; including the entirety of the backstory and culture I put in the effort of developing. "It's literally everything I want in paladin magic Nummy, 5:11 pm" (Unable to appropriately format a Skype quote due to Web Skype, I'll post a legitimate one when I'm home.)

Could you exemplify this? I don't think it's rather fair for it to be called a mess when you haven't participated in the Paladins for a very, very long time. You very well may be the original lore writer but it was I who produced the next mega document and made Xan what he is today, I've produced over thirty pages quite literally revolved around the Aengul, the magic, and their culture; this doesn't deviate from what they're "meant" to be. Each deific group (excluding druidism) is currently undergoing a re-write in order to differentiate themselves from one another, so it isn't just Paladinism. Nevertheless, I don't believe this paints the Paladins in a negative way - especially when I've had players come up to me expressing keen interest in the magic due to this submission - albeit was liked by the majority of the chat. None of the lore has gone unused, I haven't dabbled in the Clerical sect of the old magic because it's alike Tahariaen magic and I'd rather not produce two magics similar to one another with a different cultural background. It's entirely redundant and isn't anything of worth. This re-write means that the Paladins will have to use their initiative in combat and come prepared instead of actually engaging in a fight and being capable of producing their own weaponry out of thin air-- similar to the armour they once wielded. To be blunt, you made them what they were meant to be years back-- then I took over due to your leave and provided an expansive culture, history, and background to both the Aengul and the Paladins; I've worked with Xan for pretty much over a year now, almost two, I believe.

I'd argue that. I don't necessarily see why everything should be hindered due to Arcanism shielding; Xan is, in the literal sense, the Aengul of Order and Guardianship therefore it is by right that his brood is capable of manifesting a shield akin to this.

is this serious