UmbreScye

I understand your ambitions and ideas, Chi as an expanded concept on a cosmic scale is really interesting in regards to asserting an important role in Magical World Lore. I look forward to your lore in the near future, at a glance it sounds like its going to be a big interesting project. I wish you luck on your idea and writing! :D

I'm talking more of the niche of Chi Manipulation fills, this iteration of the rewrite pays homage to the history and cultural origins, but is definitely not enforced in the rewrite. The idea of Chi itself is exotic compared to other magics on the server, which gives it appeal to anyone glancing at it, but conversely it's definitely not a necessary ability to enjoy the culture. Now with this writing, people have a choice to stick with culture or go rogue with their own ideas, which this writing asserts by not enforcing tenets or culture. It opens new ways for monks to explore 'life energy' on a grander scale unhindered by cultural restrictions, which is something I advocate for. When I meant that an expansion isn't necessary right now, is a personal opinion since I'd be more focus on rebuilding our community. In fact, it's more interesting for a stronger version of Chi to be derived and created from RP from extensive study of 'life energy'. In regards to the other magics, it's easy for Chi to disappear and monks go to learn Water/Fire evocation or something similar. You could say the same about most magics and CA's. If others such as yourself want the idea of 'life energy' to evolve in a different way aside from Chi, by no means am I saying that you shouldn't, I think it'd be an interesting road to take especially if Chi fails. Magic at the end of the day is an aesthetic that improves upon pre-existing culture, roles, and RP, which this rewrite fulfills regardless of how potent the abilities are. In my opinion, what gives magic an appeal is when there is a niche type connected to it. Regardless if you respond, it's fine to disagree, and a discussion helps open up new ideas/thoughts. I enjoyed your criticisms and work in the previous iterations of Chi, so I look forward to seeing your written ideals of these concepts in the future!

I don't agree with letting Chi die off, it definitely needed improving but the cultural aspects is what makes Chi an interesting niche and magic to learn. Sun/Moon Chi was initially made as a bonus to the cultural aspect of Huajiao and successor to old Chi, the focus was for Chi to be an existing tangible energy to support its cultural concept from Hou-Zi Huajiao. If we're going all the way back to the first few iterations of Chi, it didn't change that it was for an Eastern Asian monk RP niche and it still retains that even now. As an old Hou-Zi player I don't see how this rewrite hinders the magical concept or even the RP concept, sure Chi could be greater but there isn't any reason or necessity for it right now, other magics could easily fill in the gaps that Chi briefly touches on. It fulfills its original purpose and exists for the RP niche it covers. In its current state as a single slot, this rewrite works fine since the niche it revolves around is a relatively small population.

Glad theres a new rewrite out, the formatting is really nice at a glance. I'll only comment on what I didn't work on; I really like the way the monk abilities pan out in difficulty and intensity, it makes a lot more sense than the original Sun + Moon Chi Manipulation system. Tier progression feels natural and earned, which is nice to see with this rewrite. Smaller criticisms I'll just DM, but overall its an improvement based on the previous rewrites I've seen and I'm lovin' it. +1

damn that red tag do be lookin h o t 😎 [[congrats bud!

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Steaming hot, right off the creative press... Very nice, it was fun watching the drafts and helping out wherever! +1

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Fae Reusvuln sat alone on the rooftop of the Reusvuln household’s home, the evening clouding the sky with stars as darkness took over the city of Helena. It was awfully silent, unlike the usual bustling nights the Valah city was well known for. In one hand the elfess held a long silver pipe, and in another was a note detailing the demise of Sepp. She crumpled the paper with her hand, and stuffed the whole thing into her pocket. Only outrage was visible on her face as she gritted her teeth, shaking her head subtly in a displeased manner. “I knew you’d die, leaving a bunch of kids that loved you behind. Guess that’s the life we signed up for anyways, ain’t that right?” She muttered, taking an inhale of the fumes from her pipe and staring up to the sky. “Hopefully Malin pities your sorry behind, you fool.” She exhaled, continuing to stare up at the sky as she leaned back on the rooftop.

Feng Guihua swiftly signs the document.

[For some reason the quote button will not work for me, but for context I am responding to the comment about flammability from @Katherine1] Ohh I see what you mean! I understand that the creature is made up of living plant matter with water in its body, so it would make sense that even though it is a bit susceptible to flames it isn’t that intense to be considered a major weakness of the species. I don’t have any further questions or feedback at the moment, but thank you for responding quickly to my comment block haha. Good luck with the lore bud, I’m excited to see actual CA’s sprouting from this lore and seeing them around.

Personally, I really enjoy this lore piece and I think it is fantastic. I think the rebirth section is oddly beautiful and intriguing in a sense, I believe it would promote some very interesting role-play scenarios. I think this CA is very nice and well balanced, being susceptible to sword slashes and cuts in general is also a neat addition to the design. Being able to travel all over just to plant these seeds, could be a great opportunity to promoting unique role-play in various settlements. Also, the formatting is very well done and the sections are clearly labeled. One thing that I noticed in the beginning: “...They burn about the same as any well-hydrated plant”, perhaps you can add something about this in the red-lines? I apologize if I accidentally missed another detail on the topic of being flammable, but just for good measure it might be a neat thing to quickly go over. Also a question, if an Epiphyte was theoretically ignited on one portion of its body and happened to survive; Would the process for healing this burnt wound take longer or will it be the same time length as a severed wound? Perhaps the creature ‘sheds’ the burnt portions of its body? Maybe the body grows weak during the healing process? Again, apologies if I accidentally skipped something that is related to this question and idea. Overall, I very much like this lore and it was a pleasant read! I’m not trying to be incredibly critical of the piece since I really do enjoy it, but I hope my feedback helps a little bit. +1

I hope my feedback helps, apologies if it seems a bit rough or vague. It has been a while since I saw a race like this that is not inherently over-powered, so I very much appreciate lore piece. It will bring a lot of interesting role-play into the server, I am sure of it. Good luck on getting accepted, I hope to try playing one if it does! ?

Personally I like this concept as it’s very much a toned down and neater version for what I expect a CA race to be. The rest of this section will be solely my opinion, and I hope it maybe helps think about the species a bit more! However, I do think that the sections regarding the ‘eyesight’ of a Nathair are unneeded, and could perhaps just remain as a simple quirk to the species. Meaning, you could probably just merge the section if you still wish to keep it instead of breaking it into two parts. Also, could there be some cases where the ‘spectacle’ could be part of the human form as well? I think that would be interesting, a bit obvious that the person isn’t human, but still a comical idea that their disguises are not always perfect. Early signs that a Nathair is getting ready to shed would also be very interesting. The difference in strength as you stated [be it weaker in combat and a lack of stamina] would probably also effect their actual agility in combat as well. The weight of carrying a [1-handed or 2-handed] sword could be quite immense, and it could essentially weigh down the Nathair. However, one could argue that the exact swords they wield are indeed very lightweight as well. Perhaps they are trained to use multiple to their advantage, and it would be a lot less stressful on their body to carry those weapons. I think this trait easily reflects on their natural ‘cunning’ and ‘sly’ nature as well. For the swordsmanship section, I believe it should be toned down to [light weight] daggers, knives, or swords because of their lack in physical strength. I do like their ‘shedding’ ability and being able to go back/forth between human and true form. I’m glad to see a lot of restrictions and additions to their ‘mental’ stability, especially from being raised at birth. For their age, does it mean that it’s often not seen that Nathair live from 200-300, or is that typically the limit for this species? Personally, I would like to learn a bit more about the ‘The Concealer, The Guardian and The Bestower’ lore as well, and perhaps how Nathair live/strive in a society consisting of just them. Although they have a very concrete idea for their knowledge seeking and distributing nature, it would be cool to see more advances with their culture as well. Apologies for talking so long, but I really do like this idea! I hope that it passes, since I think this is really neat. Overall I’m glad that there are clear red-lines and examples to the abilities as well. +1

Faux reached over to pull the announcement off a nearby board, flicking at the paper to straighten it. Her mask covered her expression, but as she peered over it she furiously tapped the ground with her foot. “Innocent travelers? I’m pretty sure they were bandits, we were just doing our job keeping the roads safe!” She jested with some fellow Ruswick men, letting out a hearty laugh at her comment. – Uppori Visaj would only frown as she read over the missive, seeming distraught that yet another war was occurring. “How many wars must we partake in? Our efforts should be kept with handling the Irrinor situation...” She let out a rather somber sigh just as she placed the announcement on her table. She took a seat in front of her desk, quickly writing some letters to her friends, family, and employees. With a stamp of of the Visaj Seal, she would place an incredibly short missive right on top of the tavern doors: “The White Stag Tavern will assist in ensuring the Sillumiran do not go hungry, please donate food and materials for the war effort. – Uppori Visaj.”

Uppori Visaj stared at the missive, sighing deeply as she remembered the march to Irrinor. “Another war with the Mali’ame? Hrm...” She clutched the missive, tossing it aside quickly as she picked up a quill to write to a friend. She exhaled once she finished her letter, sending it off immediately.

Uppori Visaj picked up yet another book, quickly browsing the contents with great curiosity fueling her. She does not often get to read literature written by the Sohaer, unless it is a missive dealing with political affairs. She became engrossed in the book, Elven minutes soon turned into Elven hours as she flipped through the contents with incredibly speed. Along the way, she took notes as well whenever she could. “Another piece of literature detailing our history, it is wonderful to see more in the Eternal Library.” Uppori shut the book slowly, placing it back on the shelf that it belonged to. After brushing her hands off slowly and packing her notebooks, she could not help but remain intrigued by the history makers around her.

Uppori Visaj would read over the contents of the book, seemingly interested by the contents. Within an office located in the Eternal Library, she carefully examined the written work of the Sohaer. After a long while, most likely a couple of Elven hours of reading through the information, she would close the book shut and briefly exhaled. “It is rather relieving to know more about the history of our people.” Uppori mumbled to herself, a smile sprawled across her face as she finished the book.

Uppori Visaj flipped open the book, reading its contents slowly. Uppori paused, tilting her head lightly at the contents. She slowly folded the book back in its old position, leaving it in the same place as she plucked it from. “Hm..This vague ‘ata consuming future is truly a horrific idea. I hope that we focus on maehr’sae hiylun’ehya and deliver swift justice to any ‘ata for attempting to climb our ranks.” She brushed her hands off, exhaling as she finished her thought. Uppori would slip into a seat nearby, beginning to write by lifting her quill. Her ears perked up and twitched for a moment as she seemed full of ideas from the fictional novel. “This book’s plot becoming a reality is.. rightfully incredulous to me. Though the Silver Diarchy has gotten close to this novel’s ‘ata future a couple of times in our history, I am sure the state will ward off any dangers the ‘ata toss at us.” Uppori thought completely to herself, only she could hear what she would be thinking about. However, she glanced at the ‘thill walking about and embracing the knowledge around them. She smiled contently, continuing to write in her book. “Hm.” She concluded the thoughts in her mind, blending in with the library as she wrote away.

The lore is well written, and the idea seems very well thought out and original. I very much enjoy this concept, and if they end up being accepted I would love to try playing one! I do believe early on when the CA is developing, a central base in the ocean would be pretty cool. I like the restrictions that they have, and they aren’t OP in any crazy way. Maybe if this species starts to walk around on land more, they can develop underwater sectors of currently existing Nations as well due to partnerships. I think this CA can help add more diversity if role-played as intended. Good luck bud, I think this lore piece is looking great. I would definitely want to try one of these out based on how well written the lore is. +1 - Fruu

Feng Guihua would be picking herbs far into Queens Isles, but she would remember back to the dastardly Mother eating the Huangdi. Guihua shivered with a frown as she left herbs in her basket, heading far away from both her old home and Llyria. Guihua could only run, and with that thought she could not fathom meeting her Xiongdi after the terrible battle. She raised up a pot, placing it beside a large boulder and lighting some dried sage leaves. She would place incense sticks on the sides of the pot, praying quietly. “Goodbye, friend. May Hou-Shen welcome you into the realm of ancestors. Arcas did not deserve such a trustworthy Hou, even after the many lunar cycle of existence. From running away during the Qinghai massacre, to the unfortunate move to Llyria... Guihua is sorry for not staying with her Xiongdi brethren.” Guihua would blow out the incense sticks and the pot of incense, however she would pull out a large wooden plank with the name ‘Hsieh Xin’ carved onto it. She would plant the plank deep into the ground, sobbing as she stared at the makeshift grave. She used her torn sleeve to wipe her eyes, traveling once more far away from the others she once knew. Guihua held an unfamiliar instrument in her hand, playing a song that no one has ever heard before.

I think it is quite wonderful, as the locations are easy to reach and it’s worthwhile to go on an rp exploration. However, I personally would enjoy more locations [and perhaps dangerous locations] to find herbs in the jungles. I spent quite a while and perhaps I was not in the right area, but alas I failed to find anything on the Queens Isles. This could be due to my lack of knowledge on the entire layout of Queens isles as it is incredibly big, though I must admit it was very satisfying to locate these herbs. I do look forward to a brewing plugin to utilize these herbs, as they are being sold like wildfire for various prices. Another thought is that, perhaps certain plants emit a mechanical effect on the person once they pluck it. Though it may be too difficult to execute, that is just a fun thought since certain herbs have immediate random effects based on their descriptions. It would be delightful to randomly experience it, and urge people to explore in groups. Though this may or may not impact server load, so I am not sure on how well this may go if used. In terms of executing this sort of idea, it would most likely become full of glitches which would consume more time depending on how well the implementation goes. I suggest randomizing the locations, every so often [perhaps every month or two] to mimic the area not being as resourceful as usual through overuse. This may be just not exactly making a new herb spawn point, but changing what herb spawns there. Also, maybe a special herb could be found during event sites, especially in areas effected negatively. I can see a large amount of various events utilizing the plugin in a fun way. Overall, a very pleasant and fun addition to the server that enhances roleplay. Thanks for the neat plugin, and I look forward to later versions. +1 - Fruu [Apologies I may have gone overboard!]

I gotta say, the discord and community is excellent. They do well to suppress unwanted situations, and promote positivity basically every day. The community is overall very welcoming to all sorts of people, and all you need to do is come join the discord to hang out with some of the comedic + loving weirdos in there! In terms of role-play, it may not be for everyone but it is certainly very interesting. The community usually has something going on during peak hours, be it funny shenanigans or a fruitful event within the walls of the Silver State. I highly recommend reading the link before coming to Haelun’or, since of course High Elves are very wary around different races. However, it doesn’t mean we don’t have different races frolicking around in peace with us! Haelun’or is a crazy interesting place to be in with all sorts of role-play opportunities, so please come join us! [ Uppori Visaj wants all sorts of races to volunteer in the tavern, tips are yours to keep, pm Fruu_ne?#2935 ]

Kuthory Thistle grinned at the parchment that was being passed around, which was what she told herself when she looted a passerby for quick food, crinkling the paper in her hand. “Eyy? Thi’ lookin teh be a fockin ride yeh? Lookin like me’s gots an adventarrr to find.” She chortled, running off in search of the pirate crew.

(IC) Name: Juvana Kuthory Age: 215 Race: Wood Elf Reason for Joining: My reason to join is a fickle one, I seek a life of adventure, however if it also involves protect my fellow llir then I insist that I take part. For I yearn to protect those dear to me, and I wish for the freedom all Mali deserve. Saying of Oath: Lye Lent, to overgrow, this is my tenet. I Juvana Kuthory shall not steal, boast, or be bought. I Juvana Kuthory shall not dishonor the code of The Vigil. Forever vigilant, my allegiance and blade stay with The Vigil. I Juvana Kuthory am the shield of all that is virtuous. I Juvana Kuthory am the blade of all that is righteous. For a brighter future that ALL natural-born Mali’ can cherish. Until the Silver Rusts, Until the Seas Redden I Juvana Kuthory will stand and fall for the blood of all elves above all else. (OOC) IGN: Droppu Discord: I’m already in the discord server ❤️