Bogrin

A rowdy group of dirty peasants, tired of the conscription, tired of the pillaging, tired of the war time taxes cheer on the speaker. They cheer for the sons, brothers, and fathers they have lost. They cheer for an end to the aristocracy's greedy wars.

Alright I will preface this by saying I do not mean to offend in the slightest when I criticize aspects of the lore, I am just trying to flesh things out (no pun intended). First of all, the concept seems to be essentially a reskin (more unavoidable puns) of other magically attached replacement limbs. I don't know what you really mean by "tethering" the muscles, because if the limb is skeletal, it has no muscles on it. Perhaps you mean to muscles further up the limb? That would not be feasible as it is not the same muscles that run (for example), from the shoulder to the fingertips. The only way this would be feasible in terms of pairing with anatomy is if the limb was simply magically controlled in the regular manner but it is an organic replacement. Now onto the strength. In no possible way would this be anywhere near as strong as a regular limb. Lets begin with the lack of muscles, tendons and fat. Those are huge cushions against force, which is desperately needed because bone is brittle. To expand on this: if it is dry bone it is incredibly brittle and prone to chipping. The arm would be easily shattered by the force of even a normal human. Moreover, it could be easily worn by most materials, even harsh leather surfaces. In summation, I think it is an interesting idea, but the execution is inconsistent and the practicality is low.

A smelly peasant happens to be passing and overhears the speech. He scratches his head in confusion (as he is wont to do), and talks to the dirty peasant next to him. "Wots this about teacherrous dwedmar and malevolly creatures? Wodn't they talkin' about how they wanted them to join the empire not a saints day or two ago? Ploughin politicians all the same." The peasants also wonder how they always seem to be around during important proclamations.

A philosopher reads the treatise, and sits back for a moment to ponder. With determination on his face, he leans forward, dips his quill, and begins to write. Most Honorable and Holy Deacon, I Do, With The Greatest Respect, Disagree With Your Treatise On Charitable Evangelization To equate charity and our social structure is intrinsically a fallacy. To commit an act of charity is, at its very heart, an act without expecting a return. You claim those receiving of charity are beholden to their philanthropists in the same manner as the serf is to the lord, but I argue that they are not, in fact, beholden in any manner. The relationship between the serf and the lord, or the lord and the vassal is in essence an agreement, let us say for the sake of formality, a contract. This 'social contract' if you will is the basis of our society, not charity. While I do not oppose the spread of the Faith through the act of charity, I do oppose the belief that charity is the manner in which our society has been built. In addition I would believe it to be quite foolish to expect those who are recipients of the Faith's charity to be beholden to the Church. Signed, The Starving Philosopher ((yes I am of course referencing the works of Jean-Jacques Rousseau))

This was a hard decision Tythus, but I forgive you

Internet communities tend to be unforgiving, it is easy to hate when there is such a disconnect. Perhaps you could look into the Orks? They are having a rather interesting event in the works it would seem and it could be a chance to forge some good friendships.

Yeah I greatly disagreed with the redstone cannons but everyone has different opinions on where the lore should go, I don't think anyone is going to dislike you for yours. And as for friends, I have been on this server for five years, and I can count the friends I have made on one hand. They are from all different nations and groups though, maybe you haven't found your "home" so to speak. Have you tried branching out your RP to different races and groups?

A smelly peasant scratches his head in confusion "Wasn't they all jus' boastin' aboot how they will slaughter all the dwarves? What's this about friendship? Lords confuse me"

Aradel was smarter than THE average dwarf. Moreover, this is a run on sentence, it can however be remedied. "... had saved him many times. One such time was from a bear, who had decided to help itself to his equipment." Putting why a bear might want to use equipment aside, it is a grammatically correct fix, even if a bit out of place in the overall narrative. The first sentence and the last run on, and the second is a fragment. After wooden spear put a period and capitalize "this". You could put an oxford comma after "treasured moment" if you want to be tidy, but it is unnecessary to say the least. The next sentence, as previously mentioned, is a fragment. This can be fixed by simply adding an "and" before "he was driven away". The third sentence is a real mess, but can be consolidated and cleaned in a manner of ways. First, summarize his losses into merely "He had lost his entire family". If you want to be specific for some plot reason, you could specify something like "including his beautiful wife and newborn babe," but the list you currently have is unwieldy. After this put a period of course and then clean things up by saying "Aradul had nothing left in this world except the clothes on his back, and the fire in his heart." Its rather cliche, but come on your family was killed and you are setting out for answers, I don't think you are looking for a pulitzer. All in all, you really need to watch for run on sentences, and keep the lengths varied in general for a more enjoyable reading experience. Quite a few spelling errors, such as occasions, thieves and thief, and detached. Other that this you have the same issues with run on sentences as in the previous excerpt. I could correct these if you like, but it is fairly low level grammar and I am sure you can remedy them with what you already know, and with what I have previously written. Make sure you vary your sentence length, use proper syntax, and just use an online thesaurus maybe to get some spice into your diction. Overall, I have seen worse.

A dusty traveler comes across the writ as he wanders into town. His eyes glance across the parchment, and a weary look seems to come over his face. "Times have changed"

(( It isn't possible to hold both your allegiances due to the civil war, considering those two groups are at war ))

The dwarf picture you used for an example is actually a gnome, the skins are quite nice though

Bogrin Grandaxe III spits, and bites his thumb "OATHBREAKERS!" he cries in disgust

Maethirion furrows his brow, making note to warn the Pope and Knight Commander of these infidels, they may not be knights, but still infidels

Don't get kidnapped Popo, seems the only fate that ever befalls halflings.

Maethirion steps up to the Orc, raising his hand to accept the offer of 7,500.