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Burnsy

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About Burnsy

  • Rank
    Aquiring Minas

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    Burnsy#4124
  • Minecraft Username
    Burnsy__

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  • Gender
    Male
  • Location
    The Under Realm of Urguan
  • Interests
    Writing, arguing, Pink Floyd, and dwarves.

Character Profile

  • Character Name
    Ulhart Grandaxe
  • Character Race
    Mountain Dwarf

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  1. gd update fella

    1. Burnsy

      Burnsy

      Thank you, the Safety Team is committed to making the server a safer place for all.

  2. The Safety Team will not be silenced.Shame GIF - Find & Share on GIPHY
    @Tigergiri

  3. Alright, we put up the pride flag for you guys so buy the ******* VIP packs.

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    2. Dreek

      Dreek

      thank you for supporting the LGBTQ+ community by having a rainbow in your profile picture Burnsy :)^

    3. Burnsy
    4. Dreek
  4. stinky

    1. Burnsy

      Burnsy

      What? How could you say something so blatantly offensive? You’ve hurt my feelings to such a degree I’m literally shaking rn. I hope that you can consider what you’ve done here today and find it in your heart to apologize. I’ve been going through so much and this is really pushing me towards the edge of my sanity. 

  5. I hate you I hate you I hate you. Stinky, big stinky.

    1. Dreek

      Dreek

      We are all citizens of the free world- why promote hate when we can all love?

    2. Noobli

      Noobli

      What can man do against such reckless hate?

  6. thank you for keeping us safe in these uncertain times
  7. I enjoy the idea behind the magic; however, the writing is very confusing to work through. The history, ritual, and curse sections need some polishing because as they stand now, I have to keep going back to find out what I’m supposed to be understanding If you have to put in a “Key Takeaways” section, chances are your writing wasn’t clear enough. Something that needs to be written more concisely is the Progenitor Stone itself; why are there two other stones to go along with it? I could understand one other stone working with the Progenitor, but having two additional stones stretches the function of each too thin to justify their presence. Making the writing clearer and more concise in these sections, and you’ll have a much better history overall. A smaller criticism would be your formatting. The section on tiers is an example of poor formatting, as everything blends together. Make tiers/paragraphs distinct from one another. Aside from this, the post could look a bit neater overall. As for the subsequent sections (workings through the end), I get a much better sense of what the magic actually is. I enjoy the risk associated with protecting the stones and the idea of searching for artifacts to power up. The magic has a unique flavor and a lot of potential if revised. I would love to see more of this magic as it goes through the revision process.
  8. smh my head

    1. SoulReapingWolf

      SoulReapingWolf

      Your work is not over yet.

  9. Here’s an actual critique where I’ll be focusing solely on the writing and the function of runesmithing in a role play setting. Section 1: Runesmithing Basics I’ll be skipping “Using a Rune” as I see no issues with the three emote rule or how the runes can be activated and having nothing to add. Section 2: The Runes I’ll probably post the second part of my critique soon because I have a LOT to say about flesh runes and want to take the time to develop a proper argument. In my final comment I would like to address @ScreamingDingo. To a Story Writer, I would hope that the quality of writing would be the first and foremost aspect of any piece you critique. Unfortunately, that seems not to be the case in regards to your post. Why is the piece is easy denial? Surely you would take the time to point out actual flaws in the piece instead of insulting the author. You’ve detailed nothing of whats wrong with the actual lore and failed to make any suggestions of your own. If you wish to see someone else pick up the lore, which has been an opportunity for anyone to do, then why don’t you provide something of substance in your reply to incite the action you wish to see?
  10. Burnsy

    DNN #16

    ”Ah, teh onleh news source ah trust with anotheh amazin’ storeh.” Ulhart said with a chortle.
  11. “Remembeh when teh dwed o’ Kal’Varoth ‘anded Atandt teh election due teh not callin’ out teh farse dat were teh election laws? Meh too. If ah youngeh dwed should rule, get em teh run. Gimleh n’ Atandt was ah no win situation.” Ulhart sighs, waving off another piece of rhetoric that accomplishes absolutely nothing.
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