Aesopian 1125 Share Posted September 4, 2016 20 hours ago, 吳憾戰士14 said: The Hou-zi expanded and evolved their culture at an astonishing rate. Within two years they were forging their own steel. Within four, they had built their first palaces out of stone and jade. Guiding the Hou-zi through this entire process was Hou-Shen, teaching his subjects the wisdom imparted on him by Dragur himself. No, this is idiotic. Even with intense slave labor, palaces can take dozens of years to complete. Four years is absolutely ******* impossible, unless these palaces are as large as a two-story middle-class home (which I doubt they are). I would STRONGLY recommend increasing this to fifty or seventy years. You should temper your expectations now, though. The LMs probably have their own lore written for Axios already, and will be butthurt that yours is so well-liked. They will likely deny this and state simply that it 'conflicts with hidden lore', and refuse to give you any tips as to how you can clean it up. Plus, lowering your expectations prevents you from feeling sad. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
excited 10833 Share Posted September 4, 2016 I like the concept, but it's only flaw is a rather prominent one. It can't be the aborigine of Axios without some sort of creator, whether they be AenguDaemonic or not. Who made them? Also keep in mind the Ancient Elves were here first regardless as the true aborigines of times past. Keep in mind I skimmed so I likely skipped over some sort of creation story, if so, apologies. 2 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aesopian 1125 Share Posted September 4, 2016 54 minutes ago, Aerial said: I like the concept, but it's only flaw is a rather prominent one. It can't be the aborigine of Axios without some sort of creator, whether they be AenguDaemonic or not. Who made them? Also keep in mind the Ancient Elves were here first regardless as the true aborigines of times past. Keep in mind I skimmed so I likely skipped over some sort of creation story, if so, apologies. this is hilariously wrong, wow, this actually made me laugh Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
KBR 1484 Share Posted September 4, 2016 1 hour ago, Aesopian said: this is hilariously wrong, wow, this actually made me laugh Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Drop Koala 332 Share Posted September 4, 2016 This could actually be really cool. REMAKE HARAMBE Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
WuHanXianShi14 0 Author Share Posted September 4, 2016 7 hours ago, Aesopian said: You should temper your expectations now, though. The LMs probably have their own lore written for Axios already, and will be butthurt that yours is so well-liked. They will likely deny this and state simply that it 'conflicts with hidden lore', and refuse to give you any tips as to how you can clean it up. Most likely lmao, that's pretty much what I expect to happen. But I had fun writing it and seeing people enjoy it so I don't consider it time wasted 56 minutes ago, Fizl / PrivetTovarisch said: i dont want no monkey peoples they'll clearly just be like cat peoples I fail to see your logic, since the monkey people are inspired by a completely different culture and are meant to be ET creatures, not a regular playable race, can you explain? 7 hours ago, Aesopian said: No, this is idiotic. Even with intense slave labor, palaces can take dozens of years to complete. Four years is absolutely ******* impossible, unless these palaces are as large as a two-story middle-class home (which I doubt they are). I would STRONGLY recommend increasing this to fifty or seventy years. Well the Hagia Sofia was built in 5 years...even so, I took your suggestion and changed it to thirty years. 6 hours ago, Aerial said: I like the concept, but it's only flaw is a rather prominent one. It can't be the aborigine of Axios without some sort of creator, whether they be AenguDaemonic or not. Who made them? Also keep in mind the Ancient Elves were here first regardless as the true aborigines of times past. Keep in mind I skimmed so I likely skipped over some sort of creation story, if so, apologies. You literally skipped over the their creation story, which makes up a good chunk of the post, haha Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
excited 10833 Share Posted September 4, 2016 Just now, 吳憾戰士14 said: Most likely lmao, that's pretty much what I expect to happen. But I had fun writing it and seeing people enjoy it so I don't consider it time wasted If it's not passed in this form talk to me and I'll pull some strings, not all ET creatures need to go through the LT directly. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Privet 1840 Share Posted September 4, 2016 i dont want no monkey peoples they'll clearly just be like cat peoples Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
𝙻𝚞𝚟 XO 3066 Share Posted September 4, 2016 Burn the Kha and from the ashes raise of the monkey. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pinsir99 525 Share Posted September 4, 2016 As long as I may follow in the steps of the mighty Hozen "Ooker Dooker", you get my +1 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nekkore 641 Share Posted September 4, 2016 Raise of the planet of the apes. In other words this is so well written. It was a fine read. This is what is needed for our new map, something that shows different distinctive attributes and native races on the islands. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
_Sug 2563 Share Posted September 9, 2016 I love this idea! Big +1 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kralek 519 Share Posted September 13, 2016 I want to roleplay Planet of the Apes. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lhindir_ 3436 Share Posted September 13, 2016 So Harambe that weilds a katana? Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jistuma 1995 Share Posted September 13, 2016 I'm sorry to say that this lore has been Denied. Although the lore is well written, it is with a few lore flaws. The creation of the race itself is one, as it wouldn't make much sense for Dragur to create them, when they have no purpose for him. Unlike the Kha, which were made by Metzli as it's perfect creations, and the race became the purpose of that Daemon. Sections speak that the creature was before the descendants, and mentions elves being primitive, which doesn't fit well with the ancient history. The map as well doesn't fit with the creature well. The islands were the home of Malin, but now this lore would suggest that there were older species dominated the land with extensive towns. Perhaps before the start of the map, the lore might have fit, but currently it does not. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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